Bài IELTS Task 2 chiều 17/12/2017 - IDP Hà Nội - Childre prepared to deal with the problems of adult life

Question

Topic: Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts off money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents

The quality of our lives have grown. That is the reason why children are more and more concerned and surrounded by their families and society. It is thought that children living in families do not have much money handle better situations than children living by wealthy parents. I firmly support this trend and my opinions are discussed below.

Firstly, I think if a child lives independently from a young age, he will master himself and determine the future then growing up. When 6-year-olds, many parents let their children do own personal hygiene, go to school and do many things with their own strength. That helps us how to work and form a habit for the latter. We will not be passive to others.

On the one hand on the other, children brought up in families that do not have large amounts money are taught to be pleased with what they have had. They have known that life is not always pink. They must adapt to every situation and do not damande.

On the other hand, the way to live independently makes children have distance themselves from their families. Parents are busy working and their children live independently. They are not connected, children may be misled.

To sum up, children living independently need mothods and considerations. We need to learn to live independently as a child

Answer 1

The quality of our lives have grown. That is the reason why children are more and more concerned and surrounded by their families and society. It is thought that children living in families which do not have much money to handle well better situations than children living by wealthy parents. I firmly support this trend and my opinions are discussed below.
 
Firstly, I think if a child lives independently from a young age, he will master (need subjects)  himself and determine the future then growing up (should present idea clealy) .(recommend add topic sentences before give example) When 6-year-olds, many parents let their children do own personal hygiene, go to school and do many things with their own strength. That helps us how to work and form a habit for the latter. We will not be passive to others.

On the one hand on the other, children brought up in families that do not have large amounts money are taught to be pleased with what they have had. They have known that life is not always pink. They must adapt to every situation and do not damande.

On the other hand, the way to live independently (grammar error)  makes children have distance themselves from their families. Parents are busy working and their children live independently. They are not connected, children may be misled.

To sum up, children living independently need mothods and considerations. We need to learn to live independently as a child

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