Ielts task 2 12/1 IDP Hà Nội - contract driving bus and driving cars

Question

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Ussing bus and cars in recent years bear a notional difference. The first discenpancy is fares, bus is regared as the cheappest in all public transpotations, ticket bus have an advantage if compare th other vehicle, the price do not oscilate and do not change abruptly. If your destination on the last minute, you still are able to sit for a resonable price. However owing a car is very expensive, require more sotiphivated investigatation than other mass transit, the price of tax, insurance cost, driver's salary, care preparing must be considered before buying a car and that that why it is out of reach of the middle-class people. The contrastive point is flexibility, there is one  clearly view that you only get on bus in the bus stop, this might to be take much time to go to where you want and in some wrose case can be missed. On the onther hands, cars is more flexible. It is serious witness cars give the freedome to travel, do nog be limted by fixed route and timetable, additionally, owner can take family members with other necessary goods comfortablely. In conclusion, prices and flexibility are two point dissimalarity between them, Thus each person should have resonable option that bring the most convinent for themselves

Answer 1

Ussing bus and cars in recent years bear a notional difference has great differences. The first discenpancy is fares, bus is regared as the cheappest in all public transpotations, ticket bus have an advantage if compare th other vehicle, the price do not oscilate and do not change abruptly . Bus is one of the cheapest means of transportation, and the price of bus tickets often do not fluctuate. If your destination on the last minute, you still are able to sit for a resonable price. However owing a car is very expensive, require more sotiphivated investigatation than other mass transit, the price of tax, insurance cost, driver's salary, care preparing must be considered before buying a car and that that why it is out of reach of the middle-class people. The contrastive point is flexibility, there is one  clearly view that you only get on bus in the bus stop, this might to be take much time to go to where you want and in some wrose case can be missed. On the onther hands, cars is more flexible. It is serious witness cars give the freedome to travel, do nog be limted by fixed route and timetable, additionally, owner can take family members with other necessary goods comfortablely. In conclusion, prices and flexibility are two point dissimalarity between them, Thus each person should have resonable option that bring the most convinent for themselves

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