IELTS Task 2 : Advertising influences people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solutions can be given?

Question

It is true that manipulating broacasting to promote advertisement about clothes, fashion is a prevailing trend in many developing countries. There are a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle this problem. 

In my opinion, two main factors are to blame for the qay people expend money on shopping garments. Firstly, the globalization process presents people to be benefical to humans being. For example, consumers can be quickly revised all the demands throughout the advertisement so that they are easily effected by many gorgeous photoes-retouching from companies. Additionally, some publicities encourage scale of inferior prosucts to confuse the buyers. Therefor, there are many window-shopping accidents when people do not receive what they ordered.

There are several actions that could be taken to eradicate the problems discribed above. Media companies need to produce the high-quality advertising to heighten awareness of consumers. And the most obvious solution is for the aldults and all the parents is to provide their children with accurate informations about financial management then they could buy only necessary things.

In conclusion, several factors have led to undermine social values, nut measures are available to tackle this problem. 

Answer 1

It is true that manipulating broacasting(broadcasting) to promote advertisement about clothes, fashion is a prevailing trend in many developing countries. There are(is) a variety of possible reasons for this, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle this problem. 

In my opinion, two main factors are to blame for the qay(way) people expend money on shopping garments. Firstly, the globalization process presents people to be benefical to humans being. For example, consumers can be quickly revised all the demands throughout the advertisement so that they are easily effected(affected) by many gorgeous photoes-retouching(photos-retouching) from companies. Additionally, some publicities encourage scale of inferior prosucts to confuse the buyers. Therefore, there are many window-shopping accidents when people do not receive what they ordered.

There are several actions that could be taken to eradicate the problems discribed(described) above. Media companies need to produce the high-quality advertising to heighten awareness of consumers. And the most obvious solution is(?) for the aldults and all the parents is to provide their children with accurate informations(information) about financial management then(so that) they could buy only necessary things.

In conclusion, several factors have led to undermine social values, nut(but) measures are available to tackle this problem. 

Have some grammatical errors and a bit lack of vocabulary

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