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The provided graph illustrates the trend of consumers in fish and meat in a European nation from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the consumption of all kinds fluctuated considerably throughout the years mentioned.

Statistics showed that chicken consumption obtained a dramatically upward trend while others’ were downwards. In 1979, beef held the highest rank when there were approximately 220 grams consumed per person per week. The amount of fish was about 60, which was the lowest figure in the same year.

Over the next ten years, chicken consumption seemed to increase and it ranked the first with 200 grams per individual per week. In this period, that consumers less ate beef, lamb and fish caused a reduction in all three kinds.

In 1989, beef again won the greatest popularity among people when its amount achieved less than 200 and ranked the highest. Other kinds arranged respectively chicken, lamb and fish.

Afterwards, the consumption of chicken sharply increased and reached a peak at 250 in 2002. While consumers did not change their trend significantly in fish throughout the period, beef and lamb were consumed much less than they were in the past. 

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The provided graph illustrates the trend of consumers in fish and meat in a European nation from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the consumption of all kinds fluctuated considerably throughout the years mentioned.

Statistics showed that chicken consumption obtained a dramatically upward trend while others’ were downwards. In 1979, beef held the highest rank while/as (mình thấy toàn dùng while/as khi so sánh ko à bạn) there were approximately 220 grams consumed per person per week. The amount of fish was about 60, which was the lowest figure in the same year.

Over the next ten years, chicken consumption seemed to (từ này informal quá bạn, với cả bài report ko thể nói seem to dc, rõ ràng nó tăng!) increase and it ranked the first with 200 grams per individual per week. In this period, that consumers less ate beef, lamb and fish caused a reduction in all three kinds.

In 1989, beef again won the greatest popularity among people when its amount achieved less than 200 and ranked the highest. Other kinds arranged respectively chicken, lamb and fish. (chỗ này nghe nó sao sao ý bạn ơi)

Afterwards, the consumption of chicken sharply increased and reached a peak at 250 in 2002. While(Meanwhile, ) consumers did not change their trend significantly in fish throughout the period, beef and lamb were consumed much less than they were in the past. 

Bố cục nên chia 3 đoạn thôi bạn nhé, nhiều hơn cũng dc nhưng nó immature lắm. Ở task 1 bạn chỉ cần diễn đạt rõ ràng, tuân thủ đúng các quy tắc, đừng sáng tạo dẫn đến sai từ, khó hiểu, đó là yêu cầu cơ bản để điểm của bạn ở mức an toàn, ko bị trừ nhiều. :)

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Cảm ơn bạn. Ban đầu nhìn vào cái biểu đồ này mình cũng chẳng biết phải viết như thế nào nữa. Nhiều dữ kiện quá. Không biết cái nào nên viết, cái nào không nên rồi so sánh sao nên mới chia bố cục như vậy.

Với lại mình cũng tệ phần writing task 1 lắm. :( Không biết nên làm thế nào.
Uhm, mình ko để ý kỹ nội dung lắm vì ảnh đó mình xem ko dc bạn ơi.
Bạn ơi up lại ảnh nhe, mình k xem được nên không biết đề ntn?

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