Task 1_Cambridge: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002 [closed]

Question

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002

The bar chart compares the amount of calling time spent by people in the UK in term of three types of telephone over the preriod from 1995 to 2002

Overall, it is obvious from the chart that the total number of phoning minutes by local-fixed line stood at at the highest level over the period given. The phoning time saw a  considerable increase in national and international –fixed line and mobiles.

In the year 1995, it took the British people over 72 billion minutes to call local-fixed line in total. The figures for the two others were nearly a half of that number. Mobiles were hardly used at that time, just about 20 billion.

From this year, the data for local-fixed line calling still had remained unchanged after picking to just 90 billion in 1999. There had been significant rises in using national and international-fixed line and mobile by 23billion and 43 billion respectively.

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Answer 1

The bar chart compares the amount of calling time spent by people in the UK in term of three types of telephone over the preriod from 1995 to 2002

Overall, it is obvious from the chart that the total number of phoning minutes by local-fixed line stood at at ( một at thôi ^^) the highest level over the period given. The phoning time saw a considerable increase in national, international –fixed line and mobiles.( Phần overall bạn làm đúng nhưng mình chia sẻ thêm thôi nhé. Mình sẽ nêu tổng quan cái chart là tăng đều qua hàng năm, cao nhất là local, thấp nhất là mobies. Như thế dễ nhìn tổng quan hơn ^^)

In the year 1995, it took the British people over 72 billion minutes to call local-fixed line in total. The figures for the two others were nearly a half of that number. Mobiles were hardly used at that time, just about 2 billion.( sai số liệu rồi )

From this year, the data for local-fixed line calling still had a remained unchanged after picking to just 90 billion in 1999. There were significant rise in using national and international-fixed line and mobile by 23 billion and 43 billion respectively.( cái này hình như bạn bị sai số liệu ạ tại mình không thấy năm nào thích hợp với số liệu ấy và national and international-fixed line thì luôn cao hơn mobile thì respectively như vậy là không hợp lí)

Answer 2

_The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK > muốn nâng cao điểm hơn thì nên paraphrase câu này lại một chút, hoặc dùng từ đồng nghĩa khác, show > address. Được không nhỉ?

_In the year 1995, it took the British people over 72 billion minutes to call local-fixed line in total. The figures for the two others were nearly a half of that number. Mobiles were hardly used at that time, just about 20 billion > Mình thường nghĩ là nếu so sánh 1 năm thì không biết nên chọn năm có sự khác biệt rõ rệt nhất hay nên so sánh năm gần nhất, vì sẽ có ý nghĩa hơn. Nhưng là quan điểm cá nhân chứ mình cũng không biết là thi thì nên ưu tiên so sánh thế nào ???

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