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Question

The bar chart show the amount of time people in UK spent on local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line and mobile between 1995 and 2002.

It is the clear that local telephone calls took priority over other two categories in term of overall usage, throughout the time shown. However, a considerable decline in user minutes of local line was seen while there was upward trend in national and international landline calls and mobile phone.

By 1995, local calls were used for over 70 billion minutes, while the amount of time for national and international – fixed lines were half as much as local ones. By contrast, people in the UK used mobile calls for roughly 4 billion minutes. Over the next four years, the figures for three different types of phone call rose steadily.

By 1999, the number of minutes of local calls using landlines had reached a peak at 90 billion. From 1999 to 2002, there was a steep reduce to over 70 billion minutes in this category. Conversely, the figures for national and international calls and mobiles consistently increased to approximately 60 billion and 45 billion minutes respectively.

Answer 1

It is true that riding a biclycle is not prevalent among many people around the world although cycling is a better way to mitigate environmental contamination than other types of transport.Reasons for this vary, and steps need to be taken to promote the useage of bicycles.

I think that the first sentence which you used "better... than" structure is not correct. Because when you used "a better way" that is a noun, so it cannot connect with "than" . That means you should change a bit, for example "....rather than other types of transport".

"Reasons for this vary" does not make sense and impolite, maybe that should be changed in this way "reasons for this phenomenon will be discussed in this essay and resolutions need to be pointed out to promote the usage of bicycles".

To begin with, there are several reasons why few people use bicycles on a regular basis. 

few people regularly use bicyckes

 Firstly, these days people is often busier than before   ever. Many people have to take responsibility for a mountain of work at their working places; therefore, they want to spend less time on transport as much as possible.

This obviously causes  this is a dominant reason lead them to choose motor vehicles such as motorbikes or cars. 

 Another justification for this problem Another supportive explanation for the phemomenon is that today a number of people lead possess a sedentery lifestyle. 

Using bicycles consumes more energy than   needs more physical demand than  other types of transport, which deters people from choosing this means of transport. 

Firstly, the government should conduct  organize or held  suitable campaigns to raise public awareness of the detrimental  beneficial effects of motor vehicles bicycles on the environment.

thus people cycling can move faster than using the lanes of other types of transport.

thus, cyclists might move easier and faster on such lanes.

Finally, the government can impose heavy taxes on cars and motorbikes, so people will think carefully (excogitate) before buying ones.

In conclusion, the increase in using this environmental friendly vehicle is intractable, andsolutions are available to mitigate the problem. this part of the sentence does not make sense, you should re-wirte this conclusion.

hoping this is useful for you.

Answer 2

1.The bar chart shows the amount of time people in UK spent on local - fixed line, national and international - fixed line and mobile between 1995 and 2002.

2.By 1999, the number of minutes of local calls using landlines had reached a peak at (of) 90 billion