IELTS Task 2 25/6

Question

Task 2 (Academic): It is more important for governments to spend public funds on promoting a healthy lifestyle than treatment. Do you agree or disagree?

Life today is filled with numerous hazardous diseases, which is becoming worldwide concern of most government in each nation. It is argued that it is living healthily that should be improved by government’s revenue rather than any cures. I am in consummate accord with this idea, and will examine this question by considering.

Firstly, if the government invested more money on enhancing citizens’ lifestyle, it would reduce various risks of health problems. Clearly, these days, there are more many healthy people compared to patients all over the world; therefore, preventing diseases by eating healthy diet and keeping fit would be a prerequisite of each country if no one desired to encounter illness. The government, for example, could support dwellers with vaccines against hepatitis before it threatens their survival domestically, which would make consequences less devastating. Secondly, in light of the fact that treatment is not an immediate remedy, thus no matter how much money the government spends on, they have not found out the magic bullet for many diseases. Needless to say, although today there are many deadly illness, the real treatment is still questionable; as a result, thousands of people every hour could face with death in worst case scenario.

Opponents consist that it is imperative to prioritize treatment inasmuch as recently have scientists invented the cure for cancerous cells. There are some truth in this opinion, then again, not everyone could receive medical treatment because of the vast expenses of treatment. Consequently, it would be better if more spending on increasing wholesome lifestyle were to happen.

In conclusion, public budget for cures would be less useful than that for enhancing overall health. However, obviously, general populace need to assist themselves in following a balanced diet, doing exercise and protecting their own living environment.

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Answer 1

Life today is filled with numerous hazardous diseases, which is becoming worldwide concern of most government in each nation. It is argued that it is living healthily that should be improved by government’s revenue rather than any cures (Mình nghĩ câu này không rõ nghĩa lắm). I am in consummate accord with this idea, and will examine this question by considering. 

Firstly, if the government invested more money on enhancing citizens’ lifestyle, it would reduce various risks of health problems. Clearly, these days, there are more many healthy people compared to patients all over the world; therefore, preventing diseases by eating healthy diet and keeping fit would be a prerequisite of each country if no one desired to encounter illness. The government, for example, could support dwellers with vaccines against hepatitis before it threatens their survival domestically, which would make consequences less devastating. Secondly, in the light of the fact that treatment is not an immediate remedy, thus no matter how much money the government spends on, they have not found out the magic bullet for many diseases. Needless to say, although today, there are many deadly illness, the real treatment is still questionable; as a result, thousands of people every hour could face with death in worst case scenario.

Opponents consist that it is imperative to prioritize treatment in as much as recently have scientists invented the cure for cancerous cells. There are some truth in this opinion, then again, not everyone could receive medical treatment because of the vast expenses of treatment. Consequently, it would be better if more spending on increasing wholesome lifestyle were to happen.

In conclusion, public budget for cures would be less useful than that for enhancing overall health. However, obviously, general populace need to assist themselves in following a balanced diet, doing exercise and protecting their own living environment.

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