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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up to the minute information on the weather in order to procedure reliable forecasts.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The flow chart elucidates the procedure that the Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces reliable forecasts.

By observing the diagram given, it is seen that there are four stages in the process- incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast and broadcast. Each step contains pictures and notes to make the process clearly.

In the first step, the information on the weather enters devices such as satellite, radar, drifting buoy. After being receiving, the information is analyzed, forecasted. The information from satellites is represented by satellite photo. The signal of radar is viewed by radar screen while the synoptic chart is the result of data approached by drifting buoy.

The next step shows the period of preparing the broadcast from the information analyzed. Computers are the popular equipment used in this period.

In the fourth step, experts use multi-media to broadcast the reliable forecasts. The common tools used are TV newsreader, radio, recorded announcement. This is also the last step in the procedure of Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces valid forecasts.

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Mình nghĩ Bạn nên  thay "it is seen" thành "it can be seen" . Đoạn "is the result of data approached by drifting buoy." có khi thay "approached"  bằng "processed". Đoạn "experts use multi-media to broadcast the reliable forecasts" sửa thành "multimedia devices are used to broadcast the reliable forecasts". Câu cuối "This is also the last step in the procedure of Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces valid forecasts." , mình nghĩ nên là "This is also the last step in the weather forecasting procedure used by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology"
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Cảm ơn bạn đã sửa bài giúp mình. Nhưng làm ơn cho mình hỏi, mình không hiểu tại sao phải sửa như vậy? Câu của mình bị sai chỗ nào vậy bạn?
mình không chắc đâu bạn ạ :( mà mình nghĩ cái đoạn "is the result of..." là mình sửa sai nhé ,sorry :( .
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The flow chart elucidates the procedure that of the Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces to obtain reliable forecasts.

By observing the diagram given, it is can be seen that there are four stages in the process - incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast and broadcast. Each step contains pictures and notes to make the process clearly.

In the first step, the information on the weather enters devices such as satellite, radar, drifting buoy. After being receiving, the information is analyzed,  and forecasted. The information from satellites is represented by satellite photo. The signal of radar is viewed by radar screen while the synoptic chart is the result of data approached by drifting buoy.

The next step shows the period of preparing the broadcast from the information analyzed. Computers are the popular equipment used in this period.

In the fourth step, experts use multi-media to broadcast the reliable forecasts. The common tools used are TV newsreader, radio, recorded announcement. This is also the last step in the procedure of to produce the weather forecasts by Australian Bureau of Meteorology produces valid forecasts.

 

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