task 2- 25/6/2015

Question

Topic: when choosing a job, the salary is the most consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It's undeniable that getting a high-paying job is the most important for some people when they choose their career. While I accept that high salary is a vital consideration when choosing a job, I am convinced that other factors are more important than salary alone.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why people choose the jobs base on a high salary. One reason is that having a high wage may allow workers to pay for their essential needs in life such as housing, food, healthcare and education. Therefore, a high salary level would be the first priority when several job seekers apply for a company. Another reason is that receiving a wage earnings may be the main motivator to make people work harder. Due to this reason, nowadays most companies have policies to pay bonus for the best employee of the month or year as an encouragement.

On the other hand, there are other factors that I believe more important than high salary. Firstly, job satisfaction would be significant for many job seekers. Working environment or being promoted in higher positions may be more necessary than salary alone. For example, working with good managers and colleagues may make cooperation better and reduce pressure on staffs. Secondly, some people choose a job because they want to help other people and contribute something positive to communities. For instance, the staffs of Red Cross organizations, they work for peace humanity and charity purposes.

 

In conclusion, it's certain that salaries affect people's choice of career, but this is by no mean the key factor for everybody choosing a job.

Answer 1

consider high salary is the first priority  --> consider ... to be .... câu này 2 động từ nên bỏ từ is đi

 receiving a large salary is the main motivator  --> dùng sai từ, motivation mới đúng

complete excellently task --> chỗ này hơi kì kì, mình nghĩ nên để excellently trước complete hoặc sau từ task thì được hơn

much more important rather than high pay --> so sánh hơn không có từ rather

the staffs of Red Cross organizations, they work for peace, humanity and charity aims. --> dư chủ từ they, ---> the staffs of Red Cross organizations work for peace, humanity and charity aims.

Comments

Cảm ơn bạn góp ý, tớ đã sửa lại bài cho hoàn thiện bài hơn, tuy nhiên có vài chỗ tớ ko đồng ý vs cách bạn sửa nên vẫn để nguyên, bạn có thể đọc lại và góp ý cho mình nhé.

 Best regards

 Ngoc