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Question

 

 

         The first bar chart gives information about the primary for study number students of different group years , while , the second bar chart presents the number of support they received from employers.

      According to the first chart , the reson for carreer had the highest about 80 % and the percentage of reason for carrer from 26 to 29 years had greater than the group ages 30 to 39 70 % and 55 % respectively , similarly , the group from 40 to 49 years was significantly higher than the group over 49 years 40% and 19 % respectively. Incontrast , the rate of reason  for interest over 49 ages had the greatest about 60 % and the group ages 40 to 49 had greater than the group 30 to 39 years 40% and 21 % respectively , however the percentage of reason for interest under 26 years had lower than the group 26 to 29 years .

    Turning to the second chart , the rate of employer support under 26 years had the highest 60 % and the percentage of employer support from 26 to 29 ages was considerably higher than the group 30 to 39 years 50% and 30 % respectively but the proportion of employer support between 40 and 49 years was significantly lower than the group over 49 years.

      Inconclusion , in the first chart the proportion for reason carrer under 26 ages had larger than the group over 49 years.while the reason for interest over 49 years was sharply higher than group under 26 ages , similarly , in the second chart the proportion employer support under 26 years had greater than the group over 49 years.

 

 

Answer 1

       The first bar chart gives information about why students of different age group study while  the second (bar chart - có thể bỏ để tránh lỗi lặp) presents the amount of support they received from employers.

      According to the first chart , the percentage of pupils under 26 studying for their careers is at the peak of 80% , which is incredibly greater than that of the group age 26-29 as well as 30-39 at 70 % and 55 % respectively. Similarly, the 40 to 49 age range has its proportion of career almost double that of the group over 49 years. In contrast , the rate for interest of over-49-year-old students is at the greatest of 60 % and inclined to plummet to only 10% in the young adults group of age.

    Turning to the second chart, the rate of employer's support for people under 26 years old reaches the zenith of 60 % but gradually experiences a considerable downfall to 50% and 30% respectively for age group of 26-29 and 30-39. Nonetheless, the percentage witnesses a slight rise to 45% in the last age bracket.

Overall

Not very impressive. Think more about how to compare data. Learn more about comparative structures. Avoid any repetition. Mind the tenses. Should punctuate. Try harder!!!

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