Mong mọi người sửa giúp em. Task2 - culture and custom
1,062 views
0 votes
0 votes
closed

The topic is : should we follow local customs and behaviour or not. Some people argue that host country should welcome cultural differences.I am afraid of not getting the high point because my style of writing

It is true that there will obviously lots of customs and behaviors when visiting a new country. While I agree that the host country should welcome cultural differences, I do believe that new comers should follow local traditions and manner.
One a one hand, there are several reasons why the host country should adapt with the cultural diversity . Firstly, people seem to be quite interesting when acquiring strange customs and rituals . Such great customs and manners from another country will certainly enhance cultural competence and remove old customs which are boring and become inappropriate in modern life. For example, although Christmas originally come from western country , it is getting an important holiday and recently attracts a number of tourists to Vietnam . Besides, newcomers tend to be comfortable and cosy as they feel the environment like their home.
On the other hand, it is more necessary for visitors to follow local customs and behaviors. People are more likely to fully understand human communications and social environment of host country when they are familiar with local traditional. In addition, having a right manner or behavior are highly essential for them to live in a new country. For instance, it is impolite and disrespectful for greeting as well as receiving gifts older people without using both hands or bowing your head. Furthermore, there will be more positive support and advice from local people and neighbors if visitor follow traditional customs.
In conclusion, although it is beneficial for host country having cultural diversity, it is more important for visitors to follow local customs and behaviors.

by
0 points

1 Answer

0 votes
0 votes
 
Best answer

It is true that there will apparently (obviously is used more often in speaking) lots of customs and behaviors in a new country. While I agree that the host country should welcome cultural differences, I do believe that new comers should follow local traditions and manners.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the host country should adapt with the cultural diversity . Firstly, people seem to be quite interesting when acquiring strange customs and rituals . Such great customs and manners from another country will certainly enhance cultural competence and remove old customs which are boring and become inappropriate in modern life. For example, although Christmas originally come from western country , it is getting an important holiday and recently attracts a number of tourists to Vietnam . Besides, newcomers tend to be comfortable and cosy as they feel at home.
On the other hand, it is more necessary for visitors to follow local customs and behaviors. People are more likely to fully understand communications and social environment of host country when they are familiar with local tradition. In addition, having a right manner or behavior are highly essential for them to live in a new country. For instance, it is impolite and disrespectful for greeting as well as receiving gifts from older people without using both hands or bowing your head. Furthermore, there will be more positive support and advice from local people and neighbors if visitors follow traditional customs.
In conclusion, although it is beneficial for host country having cultural diversity, it is more important for visitors to follow local customs and behaviors.

enlightenedOverall

Should paraphrase. Be careful with vocabulary. Try harder!

Phần này mình xin mạn phép viết Tiếng Việt:

Bài của bạn về độ dài tạm ổn tuy nhiên mình thấy bài viết của bạn có phần chưa thoát ý:

1) Phần mở bài bạn có nói: '' While I agree that the host country should welcome cultural differences, I do believe that new comers should follow local traditions and manner." ->  Làm độc giả bối rối rằng bạn đang đồng ý với cả 2 phương án?

2) Bạn nên cho thêm câu hỏi vào phần đề bài và đồng thời xác định đây là kiểu bàn luận về 2 phía(như bạn đã viết) hay là chọn 1/2 vì đoạn 1 bạn viết về việc nên thích ứng với đa văn hóa nhưng đoạn 2 lại là về việc người nước ngoài nên thích ứng với văn hóa của chính quốc.

Cảm ơn vì đã đọc. Ý kiến của mình chỉ là chủ quan. Có gì sai phạm xin bạn bỏ quá!

selected by
by
59 points

2 Comments

Cảm ơn bạn

đề bài  là dạng agree/disagree nhưng mình thấy các bài mẫu thì ở dạng này người ta vẫn thích cân bằng 2 ý va dùng while nên mình vẫn hay dùng cấu trúc này. không biết trong bài thi có được sài không
Thế này nha bạn, nếu là dạng agree/disagree thì bạn chọn 1/2 và giải thích cho sự lựa chọn của mình. Ngược lại nếu là dạng discussion thì bạn mới nêu cả 2 nhé.

Tuy nhiên vẫn có trường hợp dạng agree/disagree một số bài vẫn có nói về 2 phương án. Cách đó được gọi là phản đề. Bạn phê phán phương án kia để làm rõ phương án mình đi theo là hợp lý. Điều này vẫn được chấp nhận và khi đó thân bài thường có 3 đoạn. 2 đoán ủng hộ phương án đã chọn. Đoạn còn lại phê phán phương án không được chọn kia.

Related questions

0 votes
0 votes
1 answer