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Question

The line graph shows the number of situation of  X disease in Someland from 1983 to 1992. As an overall trend, it is clear that the number of situation of  X sudden fluctuation  until in 1991 before dropping to zero in 1992.

From 1983 to 1994, the number of situation stood  at 100 cases. That number rose steadily to 200 by 1987 and then more sudden fall to 100 in 1988. However, there was sudden jump to 400 and  peak in 1989. The number of cases plateau from 1990 to 1991 and then went down to zero by 1992.
 

In conclusion, the line graph shows that the disease was fluctuates suddenly until in 1991 when it was eradicated from Someland.

 

Answer 1

 

The line graph shows the number of situation of  X disease in Someland from 1983 to 1992. As an overall trend, it is clear that the number of situation of  X sudden fluctuation  until in 1991 before dropping to zero in 1992. (mình nghĩ động từ bạn chia ở quá khứ ak. tại toàn những năm trong quá khứ mà bạn)

From 1983 to 1994, the number of situation stood  at 100 cases. That number rose steadily to 200 by 1987 and then more sudden fall to 100 in 1988. However, there was sudden jump to 400 and  peak in 1989. The number of cases plateau from 1990 to 1991 and then went down to zero by 1992.
 

In conclusion, the line graph shows that the disease was fluctuates (fluctuated) suddenly until in 1991 when it was eradicated from Someland.

Answer 2

The line graph shows the number of situations of  X disease in Someland from 1983 to 1992. As an overall trend, it is clear that the number of situations of  X sudden  (cái từ này mình nghĩ nên bỏ vì không hợp ngữ cảnh) fluctuated  until in (bỏ) 1991 before dropping to zero in 1992.

From 1983 to 1994, the number of situations stood  at 100 cases. That number rose steadily to 200 by 1987 and then more sudden fall to 100 in 1988. However, there was sudden jump to 400 and  peak in ( there was a suprised increase and it reached a peak of 400 cases) in 1989. The number of cases plateau from 1990 to 1991 and then went down ( là mình thì mình sẽ dùng sharp decreased) to zero by 1992.

 

In conclusion, the line graph shows that the disease was fluctuated suddenly (bỏ) until in 1991 when it was eradicated from Someland.

P/s: bài này mới được 120 từ nên sẽ bị trừ điểm vì thiếu từ, lạm dụng sudden- không đúng ngữ cảnh

Answer 3

The line graph shows the number of situations of  X disease in Someland from 1983 to 1992. As an overall trend, it is clear that the number of situation s  of  X (sudden fluctuation) fluctuated until in 1991 before dropping significantly to zero (you shouldn’t use number in overview) in 1992.

From 1983 to 1994 1984, the number of situations stood at 100 cases (because you already use the word “situations” as unit). Over the following 3 years, that number rose steadily to 200 by 1987 and then fall dramatically to 100 more sudden fall to 100 in 1988. However, there was a sudden jump in 1989, to 400 reaching its peak at 400 situations. The number of cases fluctuated from 1990 to 1991 and then went down to zero by 1992.

In conclusion, the line graph shows that the disease was fluctuates fluctuated suddenly until in 1991 when it was eradicated from Someland.

 

Answer 4

Anh/chij cho em xin nhận xét những lỗi sai của bài này vs ạ. Em cảm ơn

The line chart gives informations about the number of  people got a X desease during  11 years period from 1983 to 1992 in some nations in the worth.

It is also worth noting that in the end of perid, the figure fluatuates widely and 1992 there was nobody who has sysptom of X deasea.

To specify, 100 of cases in 1983 and the figures almost leveled off in 2 years later. From 1985 to 1988 witnessed a wide fluatuation around 150 cases. After reached a peak to 400 cases in 1989, it decreased slightly to 350 and unchaged at this position in the next year. In the end of period,the decrease number of people inflected X desease and touched a bottom to 0 cases.

In conclusion, the grapth provened that a decreased  number of people were cached a X deasease. And the more and more everyone was helthier in morden life.