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 In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because they have more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past?

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The more commercial develops, the less large family we have. Nowadays, many big families just have in the past. However, we can't deny its advantages and disadvantages of a big family.

 

I believe that the big family always have 3 primary benefits. Firstly,  Because of playing with other children, they have a chance to raise social skill and learn how to deal with problems they have. Secondly, children have aware of the valuable family. So they are willing to support their family easily. Moreover, when different generations live together, it is easy to help each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children when their parents are laboring work on the farm.

 

I think the big problem with a big family is finance. There are so many people that the cost of living will increase dramatically.  Moreover, one of the parents has to stay at home to look after the children and grandparents. This means the family earns less money. They can't afford their children's education and other activities. With so many people in a big family, it is very difficult to pay attention to the individual members. As a result, children have to resolve some problem by themselves. 

 

In my opinion, advantages of a large family are greater than disadvantages. I feel like to live in a family had many people. It maybe has less money, but family members form a stronger relationship and support each other when they have difficult problems. Every people always is surrounded by their relatives. So they never feel lonely. 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

The more commercial the world has been developing, the less large family we have. Nowadays, many big families just have(exist) in the past. However, it can be undennied that its advantages and disadvantages of a big family.

 

I believe that the big(extended) family always have(has) 3(three) primary benefits. Firstly,  Because of playing with other children, they have a chance to raise social skill and learn how to deal with problems they have. Secondly, children would be aware of the valuable family so they are willing to support their family easily. Moreover, when different generations live together, it is easy to help each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children when their parents are laboring work on the farm.

 

I think the big problem with a big family is finance. There are so many people that the cost of living will increase dramatically.  Moreover, one of the parents has to stay at home to look after the children and grandparents. This means the family earns less money. They can't afford their children's education and other activities. With so many people in a big family, it is very difficult to pay attention to the individual members. As a result, children have to resolve some problems by themselves. 

 

In my opinion, advantages of a large family are greater than disadvantages. I feel like to live in a family had many people. It maybe has less money, but family members form a stronger relationship and support each other when they have difficult problems. Every people always is surrounded by their relatives. So they never feel lonely. 

 

Answer 2

The more commercial the world develops, the less large family we have. Nowadays, many big families just exist in the past, however, their advantages and disadvantages are of great importance to be noticed.

 

I believe that the big family always have 3 primary benefits. Firstly,  the children face a great opportunity to develop their social skills and learn how to tackle with the problems they may encounter for the fact that they socialize with other children in the family.. Secondly, they can also obtain an insightful understanding of the family traditions. Moreover, when different generations live together, it is easy for them to support each other once they are in hard time. For example, grandparents can take care of children when their parents work on the farm.

 

From personal pespective, the major problem with a extended family is finance. More family members require more living cost, which may place a heavy burden on those who take responsibility  for supporting their family. They may be unable to pay for the children's education and other necessary fee. With so many people living under one roof, it is immensely arduous to pay attention to the individual members. As a result, the children probably struggle in dealing with some problems all by themselves. 

 

In my opinion, the advantages of a large family are greater than the disadvantages. I prefer living in a family which have many people. There maybe  less money, but family members form a tight relationship and support each others when they have touch problems. Each member is always  surrounded by their relatives so they never achive a sense of being abandoned.

Answer 3

The more commercial develops, the less large family [SC1] we have. Nowadays, many big families just have in the past. However, we can't deny its advantages and disadvantages of a big family.

I believe that the big family always have 3[SC2]  primary benefits. Firstly,  Because of playing with other children, they have a chance to raise social skill and learn how to deal with problems they have[SC3] . Secondly, children have aware of the valuable family[SC4] . So[SC5]  they are willing to support their family easily. Moreover, when different generations live together, it is easy to help each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children when their parents are laboring work on the farm.[SC6]

I think the big problem with a big family [SC7] is finance. There are so many people that the cost of living will increase dramatically[SC8] .  Moreover, one of the parents has to stay at home to look after the children and grandparents. This means the family earns less money. They can't afford their children's education and other activities. With so [SC9] many people in a big family, it is very difficult to pay attention to the individual members[SC10] . As a result, children have to resolve some problem by themselves. [SC11]

In my opinion, advantages of a large family are greater than disadvantages. I feel like to live in a family had many people. It maybe[SC12]  has less money, but family members form a stronger relationship and support each other when they have difficult problems. Every people always is surrounded by their relatives. So they never feel lonely. 

 

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 [SC1]Grammar error: less + large (Adj) It could not stand together.

 [SC2]Expression suggestion: it should write by word

 [SC3]Expression error: you use a complex sentence but it lack independent clause.

Refer to: There are more children than normal household therefor children themselves could play each other ……….

 [SC4]Expression suggestion: children appear frequently, you could use ‘kid, teenager, adolescent…’

Grammar error: Children is aware

 [SC5]Expression suggestion: We usually use so as linking word for compound sentence, you just need to adjust it

 [SC6]Grammar error: you already used ‘labor’ why also add ‘work’ ?

 [SC7]Expression suggestion: => the main problem of big families

 [SC8]Grammar error: you have to use ‘Present simple ‘

 [SC9]Grammar error: ‘ with so ‘ It is very strange to me.

 [SC10]Grammar error: just use one. It is two nouns

 [SC11]Expression suggestion: you need to give example to support or explain for the Idea

 [SC12]Grammar error: MAY + V or may + be + adj