Topic: People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the cause ? What are the solution? - Đây là bài viết của mình , các bạn chữa hộ dùm mình với, cảm ơn nhiều ^^.

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These days, the more the society develops, the more modern people livings are but they lack of wariness. Therefore, people are likely to be afraid of staying at home or going outside. The origin of this serious problem is caused by individual and society.  My writing will analyze these reasons and give appropriate measures to mitigate this problem.

                  To begin, the concern about staying at home. Some people believe that their houses are the safest places in order to avoid threats from outside life, unintentionally leading to the lacking of wairness of people when be in home. They disregard to the simplest things which could cause death such as: power line, sharp things in home. For example, unintentionally, people touch electric things by wet hands resulting in depressful deaths . Morever, it is also caused by the increasing of crime ; people could be pillaged even when watching TV or sleeping , being cause of lacking of sense. Furthermore, that is more serious when be outside, the people can be robbed immediately If they lose vigilance in the moment. In addition, when going outside, human could meet accidents suddenly by short of sense driving of others, leading to numerous unexpected drawbacks.

        Thus, the people should heighten their vigilance,only by which can they stay in security. Moreover , it is high time the government should have methods to prevent the increasing of crime, such as supplying jobs for poors and educating mentality of people when be childrens.

                  To conclude, safety and risk originating from our veryday actions and  the concern of the government with people. If we are to be safe, we must raise our full wairness. It is easy for us to protect ourselves.

Answer 1

These days, the more the society develops, the more modern people livings are but they lack of wariness.(Câu này bị lủng củng) .Therefore, people are likely to be afraid of staying at home or going outside. The origin of this serious problem is caused by individual and society(câu này không liên quan).  My writing -> This essay will analyze these reasons and give -> suggest appropriate measures to mitigate this problem.

Mở bài như này là không ổn rồi, nó có thể phần nào làm người chấm thi thấy "nản" khi chấm tiếp. Phần MB bạn nên paraphrase lại đề bài chứ đừng nên để lý do ngay thân bài. Một típ nữa là do ai do cái gì thì cứ ghi là due to/because of various reasons, rồi thân bài có gì thì viết ra.

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