Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Question

Nowadays, the viewpoint of whether reading books or watching TV can provide more imagination and language skills is still a controversial topic. However, in my opinion, I suppose that imagination and language skills earned from books is much variety and better than those in TV.

Of course, in this modern world nowadays, some people think that watching TV are the best solution due to their lack of time and many books have convert in to films like Da vinci code, titanic, et cetera… the other reason why some people would like to watch TV that the television nowadays are global connect and they thought that they need to update their knowledge daily and they don’t have enough time to read newspapers every day

 In the other hand, when people read books, their mind will have to imagine the  story scene , and that will improve their imagination, and each person can come out with a different scene due to their imagination when the people watching TV can only imagine one scene that in the film they have watched. Another reason prove that reading books is better than watching TV is that when people read books, they can accidentally or deliberately improve their vocabulary because most authors use rare words to express the scene more dramatically while directors of the film might use common words so viewers can understand it easily.

In conclusion, even that watching TV are more time-saving, I personal think that reading books can improve the imagination and language skills more than watching TV. 

 

Answer 1

- Body 2 bạn dùng on the other hand thì bạn nên dùng on the one hand ở body 1 sẽ logic hơn

- Cấu trúc giữa phần mở bài và thân bài và thân bài của bạn không hợp lý (nên tập trung vào body 1 và body2)

- phần mở bài bạn dùng however. Mình nghĩ however nên dùng cho ý ngược lại. Theo mình đóng góp phần mở bài như thế này bạn tham khảo xem sao :

It is argue that many people suppose that reading books can extend more imagination and language knowledge for them than watching TV. Personally, I absolutely disagree with this point of view. I will give some reasons follow :

Answer 2

Mình thì thấy bạn lạm dụng từ "nowaday" quá. Nếu là mình mình sẽ bỏ luôn đoạn "in this modern world nowadays".

think mình sẽ thay thế bằng believe

Watching TV không đếm được nên động từ theo sau sẽ là "is"

Para3 và phần conclution mình chả thấy gì.

 

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