Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Question

Some people think that working in a team brings lots of advangtages due to having support from partners. While this is true to some extent, I personally believe that working independently do have a flood of good aspects.

         In business group working, because of the importance in unity together, it is hard to agree someone’s opinion. But when we put it in a teamwork then every party has a great opportunity to be outstanding without being dominated. As a result, people will do the job to the best of their ability and more creative ideas will be made. For example, Some employees are asked to have a meeting about advertising for a new product. The problem comes when every person has their own ideas, which are all good, but it is hard to accept all the contrary opinions. This leads to an disavangtage that people feel difficult to expand their vision when being distracted by others views.

         In addition, Working lonely is the strength of the introvert, whose power can only burn when all by themselves. Having no partners, and their varying or possibly contradictory needs, introverted people put whatever truly matters to them first. They can set their own schedules, plans or targets and have unlimited freedom for creativity. These advangtages benefit them  working flexibly in a non-pressure working enviroment.

         In conclusion, I totally support the individual working due to the freedom and comfortable working place it has. The best conditions are created for talented introvert who are bad at social communication, and enable them to do the job with high productivity.

Answer 1

Some people think that working in a team brings lots of advantages due to having support from partners. While this is true to some extent, I personally believe that working independently does have a flood of good aspects.

         In business group working, because of the importance in unity together, it is hard to agree with someone’s opinion. But when we put it in a teamwork then every party has a great opportunity to be outstanding without being dominated. As a result, people will do the job to the best of their ability and more creative ideas will be made. For example, Some employees are asked to have a meeting about advertising for a new product. The problem comes when every person has their own ideas, which are all good, but it is hard to accept all the contrary opinions. This leads to an disadvangtage that people feel difficult to expand their vision when being distracted by other's views.

         In addition, Working lonely is the strength of the introvert, whose power can only burn when all by themselves. Having no partners, and their varying or possibly contradictory needs, introverted people put whatever truly matters to them first. They can set their own schedules, plans or targets and have unlimited freedom for creativity. These advantages benefit them working flexibly in a non-pressure working environment.

         In conclusion, I totally support the individual working due to the freedom and comfortable working place it has. The best conditions are created for talented introverts who are bad at social communication, and enable them to do the job with high productivity.

Answer 2

Mình xin góp ý cho bạn một số word patterns, errors grammar mà bạn dùng sai nha : 

 In business group working, because of the importance in unity together, it is hard to agree someone’s opinion. 

 ->  importance of, agree to or agree with 

This leads to an disavangtage that people feel difficult to expand their vision when being distracted by others views.      -> a disadvantage, other views. 

The best conditions are created for talented introvert who are bad at social communication and enable them to do the job with high productivity. -> a talent. is bad. 

 In addition, Working lonely is the strength of the introvert, whose power can only burn when all by themselves. -> working alone .

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