IELTS task 2: In many big cities in the world, the quality of life is decreasing. What are the causes and solutions for this?

Question

These days, despite the development of many big cities in the world, there is a decrease in the quality of life. This essay will discuss the causes of this problem and suggest some solutions.

To begin with, there are two main reasons which lead to life decrease. Firstly, the overpopulation in some rural areas has brought many adverse effects to people’s life. To be more specific, when there is gradual increase of population, there will be considerable growth in the number of transportation such as cars or motorbikes and in the amount of garbage from citizens. And as a consequence, pollution might be caused, which probably has a negative impact on people’s life. Furthermore, over population is also a reason for the overload in schools, hospitals and public places, which also reduces quality of life in the cities. Secondly, the modern society and the hectic life in many big cities sometime brings to people stress, depression and diseases, which contributes to the lower quality of people’s health than in the past.

It is vital that action is taken to combat this problem. Not only should governments ensure that adequate policies and legislation are in place that can control birthrate but they should also improve the infrastructure of public works such as parks, stations, hospitals, etc. Parents also have a part to play. They should have family planning in order to stop over population. Each individual must also give a hand to protect the environment. For instance, people should use public transports instead if private transports.

In brief, the lessening in quality of life in big cities is result from several factors, but measures are available to tackle this problem.

Answer 1

These days, despite the development of many big cities in the world, there is a decrease in the quality of life. This essay will discuss the causes of this problem and suggest some solutions.

To begin with, there are two main reasons which lead to life decrease. Firstly, the overpopulation in some rural areas (rural : nông thôn) has brought many adverse effects to people’s life. To be more specific, when there is gradual increase of population, there will be considerable growth in the number of transportation such as cars or motorbikes and in the amount of garbage from citizens. And as a consequence, pollution might be caused, which probably has a negative impact on people’s life. Furthermore, over population is also a reason for the overload in schools, hospitals and public places, which also reduces quality of life(bạn có thể dùng living standard thay thế từ life) in the cities. Secondly, the modern society and the hectic life in many big cities sometime brings to people stress, depression and diseases( theo mình thấy ý này bạn nên làm rõ hơn. nó khá mơ hồ khi đọc), which contributes to the lower quality of people’s health than in the past.

It is vital that action is taken to combat this problem. Not only should governments ensure that adequate policies and legislation are in place that can control birthrate but they should also improve the infrastructure of public works such as parks, stations, hospitals, etc. Parents also have a part to play. They should have family planning in order to stop over population. Each individual must also give a hand to protect the environment. For instance, people should use public transports instead if private transports.( phần giải pháp mình đọc thấy chưa thuyết phục và không giải quyết được lý do bạn vừa đưa ở đoạn trên)

In brief, the lessening in quality of life in big cities is result from several factors, but measures are available to tackle this problem.

Comments

In 1900s, the large cities, like New York, London, attracted many people because of a good standard of living with prosperity. To compare with now, the quality of life that time is far higher than. In recent years, the life in cities is more difficult due to many kinds of tax, high competition among others. The causes regarding dropping the life standard will be examined hereafter with some solutions being given.

In terms of causes, the main reason leading to the drop in quality of life is excessive people in cities. Then it makes a chain of bad consequences such as unemployment and crime. Every great city is trapped in the  paradox of wealth. In the past, metropolitan centres provided many opportunities for people to start businesses, get well-paid jobs and myriad of optimistic things. More and more people from rural areas with hopes for better life did immigrate into great cities. As a result, the needs of white and blue collars were over. Therefore many people have been jobless. It is undoubtedly that the high unemployment rate will lead to the phenomenal level of crime rate. More and more criminals such as thieves, burglars and roughs; appear on streets. Subsequently, government have to spend a great amount of budget to reduce a crime rate instead of building more hospitals, schools and services centers which improve citizens ‘lives.

Considering to solutions, attracting people to rural areas by industrialization is the best way. It also brings the balance to the cites and countries. An another possible measure is quite good. Limiting people to immigrate into urban areas so as to ensure about the life standard of citizens in urban areas.

The bottom line is that ensuring the perfect number of labors in an area unit will help the standard of living enhance.

 

This is may onw ideas. maybe u could get somthing from it..

Answer 2

bài ổn nhưng có chút góp ý: 2 body nên cân đối và không nên dùng lẫn lộn firstly/ secondly với furthermore/in addition(đoạn 1)