Đề: In many big cities in the world, the quality of life is decreasing. What are the causes and solutions for this?

Question

These recent years have seen the incredibly high economic growth rates of many countries. This, in turn, boosts the standard of life especially in big cities but not the quality of life. This essay will look into the causes and ­­come up with solutions for this problem.

Citizens of big cities are living a life in fast lane. Hardly a day goes by when we are not occupied with work or otherwise social duties. We are so engrossed in them that we start to forget what a true life is all about. What’s more, easy access to the Internet means we can complete anything with a computer. We conduct businesses, chair meetings, buy things or even travel aboard through a screen. And as a result, we are restricted to our whereabouts and keep ourselves to ourselves, which isn’t helpful when it comes to fitting in with society, not to mention building a lasting relationship.

So what should we do to put an end to this situation? Many gyms, shopping malls and beauty salons are established these days. Then, why don’t we take a leave of our busy lives and spend some time on ourselves. We can take up a hobby to wind down after an exhausted day. Putting aside an amount of time to gather with your relatives on a day out could help us strengthen the family bonding. In addition, we should only consider the Internet a tool that assists us in keeping up with the time or improving our knowledge.

To conclude, I think a balance must be stroke between making the most of an advanced community and sustaining a healthy and joyful life. We wouldn’t want our world to turn into a revolution- stricken society.

(288 words)

Answer 1

These recent years  have seen the incredibly high economic growth rates of many countries.  

dramatical growth of economy in many  countries

This, in turn, boosts the standard of life especially in big cities but not the quality of life. 

standard of life là quality of life mà bạn =D

This essay will look into the causes and ­­come up with solutions for this problem.

Comments

cám ơn bạn. Mình nghĩ high economic growth rate không có vấn đề gì, nghĩa là tốc đọ tăng trưởng nhanh.
mình cũng nghĩ rằng standard of life khác quality of life. Standard of life nghĩa là mức, tiêu chuẩn sống do sự phát triển xã hội đem lại, còn quality of life là ảnh hưởng của nó đới vs bản thân mỗi người. giông như tôi có nhiều tiền ( standard) nhưng tôi không vui vì tôi giàu (quality)

Answer 2

In addition, we should only consider the Internet a tool that assists us in keeping up with the time or improving our knowledge.

mình nghĩ nên có 1 câu theo sau support câu này để nghe cho đỡ thiếu, cảm giác như bạn chỉ đề suất 1 ý, xong để đó, mình đọc thấy hơi bị hụt :)) Nếu là mình mình sẽ sửa là "In addition, we should only consider the Internet as a tool that assists us in jobs and information update. Spending too much time on the Internet may make us feel less vital, which eventually prevents us from doing meaningful things and appreciating the beauty of life."

 

Comments

mình nghĩ giống bạn nên đưa ra nhiều hơn nữa, đọc cảm thấy cụt giữa chừng qá