IELTS task 2- wild animals [closed]

Question

wild animals have no place in 21th century. protecting them from extinct is a huge waste of human's resources

to what extend do you agree of disagree?

 

nowadays, human are distroying the food web of the entire eco-system to produce things. it leads to the decline in the population of natural animals. somepeople think that wild animals have no importance in the 21th century. preventing from extinction is a huge waste of human's resources. i think that idea is completely incorect.

needless to say, the diversity of nature offers may advantages to all the creatures live in it, concluding all the living things and they have linked together since the begining of the earth. by breaking every single conection between all the species, namdkind is notonly distroying animals but also leading themselves to the distruction. futhernore, if we do nothing to save them, our next generations might not have a chance to see the beautiful and recive the advantages of nature.

one might think that protecting them is very expensive but it is nesesary to do that. there ia a clear link betwee deforestation and wild animal's extinction. the population of wild animals declining because we are distroying their habitats. therefore, protecting them and their natural habitats is protecting the enviroment. futhermore, we can still recive benefits from saving them. for example, many residents choose the national parks or wildlife reservation areas to stay during their holidays. it will bring a great income to one's country and create more employment opotunities for local people.

in conclution, i think it's important for everyone to have a say in this problem because when all is said and done, there is little we can do to save wild animals and the enviroment without the full support of the goverment and society. 

 

Answer 1

nowadays, human are distroying (correct: destroying) the food web of the entire eco-system to produce things. it leads to the decline in the population of natural animals (correct: wild animals or wildlife). somepeople (correct: Some (people)) think that wild animals have no importance in the 21th century. preventing from extinction is a huge waste of human's resources. i think that idea is completely incorect (correct: incorrect).

needless to say, the diversity of nature offers may advantages to all the creatures live (correct: living/ that live) in it, concluding (correct: including) all the living things and they have linked together (correct: to each other) since the begining of the earth. by breaking every single conection between all the species, namdkind (mankind) is notonly distroying (correct: not only destroying) animals but also leading themselves to the distruction (correct: destruction). futhernore (correct: Furthermore), if we do nothing to save them, our next generations might not have a chance to see the beautiful and recive (correct: perceive) the advantages of nature.

one might think that protecting them is very expensive but it is nesesary (correct: necessary) to do that. there ia (correct: is) a clear link between deforestation and wild animal's extinction. the population of wild animals is declining because we are distroying (destroying) their habitats. therefore, protecting them and their natural habitats is protecting the enviroment. futhermore, we can still recive (correct: receive) benefits from saving them. for example, many residents choose the national parks or wildlife reservation areas to stay during their holidays. it will bring a great income to one's country and create more employment opotunities (correct: opportunities) for local people.

in conclution, i think it's important for everyone to have a say in this problem because when all is said and done, there is little we can do to save wild animals and the enviroment without the full support of (correct: from) the goverment and society. 

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