Topic: children educating is expensive. In some countries, the government pay partly or all education fees. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Question

 

In some countries, children education is supported partly or all education fees by government. While this may cause some negative consequences, I believe that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

It is true that paying education fees for children brings potential problems for this country. Firstly, many social services will not be taken care of by the government. All of vital services will not be subsidized by the government to serve citizen. Quality services are dangerous in decreasing strongly. Furthermore, some taxpayers who have no children will feel unfair because they have to pay tax yearly for the government to support other people’s children.

On the other hand, when the government provides education tuition for children, several positive impacts can be anticipated. The children are the future of a country. Therefore, investing for education is at a top priority. As a result, illiteracy rate may decrease rapidly because the government pay education fee instead them. The more investment for education we make, the better workforce in the future we have. Moreover, a large of money is saved to spend on better nutrition and health care for children than before.

In conclusion, spending nation budget on education for children have some potential drawbacks, I believe that the advantages is greater.

Answer 1

- In some countries, children education is supported partly or all education fees by government =>the government funds act as a support for the school-aged students to pay their tuition and other educational services' fees (you should rephrase the thesis) . While this may cause some negative consequences, I believe that its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.  => When it comes to the consequences of the authorities' incentive for education, I am convinced that the adventages outweigh the disadvantages.

- If your essays have 2 body-paragraphs, they should reveal 2 supporting points taking the clearly coherent perspective towards the said thesis statement. Your first body-paragraph should concentrate on a major reason, and the drawbacks of the problem should be revealed in the first 2 sentences of the second body-paragraph, called "the concession", and then they would be denied by other persuasive point of view ("the refutation")

- You should use more academic words in order to get higher score.

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