Acid Rain Emission - please HELP me

Question

1.1.           UK acid rain emission

The graph below shows UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tones, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

A glance at the line graph above indicates some comparisons in the amount of acid rain emissions which were produced from four different sectors over a period of 17 years in the UK.

It is evidence that total the amount of emissions caused by acid rain in the UK between 1991 and 2007 dropped dramatically. The highest decrease was seen in electricity, gas and water supply.

In 1991, around 3.3 million tons of acid rain emissions came from electricity, gas and water supply. The figure of domestic sector was around one fifth that amount, at 0.6 million tons while transport and communication contributed 0.7 million tons of acid rain. Just over 2 million tons of acid rain gases came from other industries.

In the year 2007, emissions from electricity, gas and water supply fell significantly 2.8 million tons, stood at 0.5 million. Sharing the same trend, both figures of acid gases from home and other industries sectors had gradually dropped, reached at 0.2 million tons and 1.5 million tons respectively. It is obvious that in 2005 the number of acid rain gases from transport and communication sector had slightly increased, peaked at 1 million but then fell off to 0.7 million approximately. 

Answer 1

I think one special point in this graph is that three sectors clearly dropped but not all dropped drammatically so that you can not use the abverb drammatically to describe in this case. Moreover, one sector was transport and communication, the trend was on the contrary it sligtly increased to 2005 before a fall. So that when you  describe you must pay attention.

Comments

thank you so much for your comment. do you have any other recommendation instead of using dramatically? cause i get stuck >.<. one more thing was that i also mentioned the sector of transport and communication in 2005 which is " It is obvious that in 2005 the number of acid rain gases from transport and communication sector had slightly increased, peaked at 1 million but then fell off to 0.7 million approximately."

once again, I do appreciate your comment. Wish you the best. thank you

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mình nghĩ bạn có thể thay dramatically thành considerably xem sao. ^.^

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cám ơn bạn nhiều ^!^