Human activities had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.
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In the last decades, Individuals have had more devastating consequences for the earth’s creatures for many different reasons. As a result, people have encountered a dilemma of whether to amend this case or not. From my perspective, it is possible to conduct if we have a combination of all communities. This essay delves into both viewpoints.
 
On the one hand, Some presume that it is impossible to tame human’s adverse impact on the earth’s fauna and flora. First and foremost, a trend for urbanization from the galloping population growth is as a result of more deforestation for human settlement as well as agriculture encroachment. More specifically, this issue is often associated with natural habitat destruction, which leads to difficulty surmounting. For example, the government is rarely able to cause damage to a city for afforestation. Moreover, More illegal hunting activities for personal economic benefits have driven numerous plant and animal species to extinction. The most superb notion of this problem is going back to the past.
 
On the other hand, with the participation of all of society, citizens still could impose many diverse proposals to address their catastrophic effects on creatures. The authorities could institute a variety of gene banks by gathering gen specimens from endangered plants and animals. As a result, scientists could construct the same species through artificial insemination. Besides, legislation acts as an effective measure to deter human’s natural destruction activities. Specifically, a policy of zero tolerance is implemented, which has the potential to create the feeling of fear for criminals to lower poaching as well as illegal logging rate. 
From my aforementioned analysis, I would contend that the possibility of improving the devastating influences on fauna and flora is achievable with a combination of many distinct remedies including scientific methods and stricter laws. 
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I will give you some ideas about the introduction.

"In the last decades, Individuals have had more devastating consequences for the earth’s creatures for many different reasons."

First, the word "Individuals" with the "I" arbitrarily capitalized would pretty much ensure a low score for "Lexical Resource". You used the adjective "devastating" that fits well with the noun "consequence". However, it is not "individuals" that have had more devastating consequences for the earth’s creatures. In fact, it should be something they have done that has had more devastating consequences for the earth's creatures, for example, their over-exploitation.

"As a result, people have encountered a dilemma of whether to amend this case or not."

"Amend" here means to change the words of something written, especially a law or a document, so "amend the case" did not make sense.

From my perspective, it is possible to conduct if we have a combination of all communities.

The word "conduct' is the transitive verb, which means that it needs an object following. In addition, "a combination of all communities" did not make sense. The word "combination" refers to a mixture of 2 or more things combined, whereas all communities are referring to many groups of people.  The word "coordination" would work here.

Last, "this essay delves into both viewpoints." is fine.

Overall, such an introduction with many errors in word usage can make a bad impression for your essay.

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