people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights, while others argue that animals should be employed to satisfy mankind’s various needs. [closed]

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people have different views about whether animals should be treated in the same way. While other people think that it is more important to use them as we desire for food and medical research. I personally believe the animal need be more rights

Answer 1

People have different views about whether animals should be treated in the same way or not. While other people think that it is more important to use them as we desire for food and medical research. I personally believe the animal need be more rights.

Bạn nên dùng synonym cho people nha, ví dụ : It is argued/considered/....that = while others think that = while people think that

+ Câu màu xanh lá cây :

Bạn dùng văn phong tiếng Việt nên khi đọc hơi khó hiểu cho lắm, và không nên dùng "we" trong task 2, mình sửa như sau : 

....use them for food and medical purposes.

+ Câu màu xanh dương :

Đằng trước "I" là dấu phẩy chứ không phải chấm nha. 

"the animal need be more rights" câu này hơi khó hiểu? Chắc ý bạn là động vật cần có quyền lợi hơn, bạn xem lại câu đó nha.