4. The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Question

The variety of advertisement bring serveral impact to the community. It is true that a forbidden on all kinds of ads as it unhelpful objective, and could be detrimental for the advantages of public. Personally, I somewhat in favor of this opinion because there are a few adverts Product exaggeration beyond reasonable level, take advantage of users misunderstandings to entice. Nevertheless, some forms of advertising make many virtuous habits for everyone.

First and foremost, most promotional products overstate in view of the fact that advertisers promote the benefits of the product but not demonstrate superiority over other products. Thereby, users are misunderstood about the function of the product and make good products gradually drop the position in the market. It directly affects the health of individuals.

Secondly, exploit ignorance of users to cheat as the advertising tricks extremely delicate,  consumers haven't the opportunity to prepare. It causing the customers to select products but ignore the side effects of the product. As a result negatively affect the healthful of people or the welfare of users.

However, I am also convinced that the sorts of advertising may also lead to positive outcomes. One such possibility is that Some ads carry content related to social change that can help promote empathy and a sense of community responsibility in human. (For example: Environmental protection ads also call people's attention to the problem,...)

In conclusion, while there are justifications for the society wouldn’t be beneficial from a ban total sorts of advertising. Overall, I would contend that the negative consequences are more prominent.

Answer 1

The variety of advertisements brings several impacts to the community. It is true that a forbidden on all kinds of ads should be enforced (as it unhelpful objective)->due to their unhelpful objectives, and could be detrimental for the advantages of public. Personally, (I am somewhat in favor of this opinion)->I, to some extent, agree with this opinion (because there are a few adverts Product exaggeration beyond reasonable level, take advantage of users misunderstandings to entice. Nevertheless, some forms of advertising make many virtuous habits for everyone.)->không cần thiết. Phần giải thích bạn nên để dưới thân bài

First and foremost, most promotional products overstate (in view of the fact that)->because (hơi dài dòng nha hihi) advertisers promote the benefits of the product but not demonstrate superiority over other products. Thereby, users are misunderstood about the (function of the product)-> products' functions and make good products gradually drop the position in the market, which could directly affect the (health of individuals)-> consumers' health conditions.

Secondly, exploit ignorance of users to cheat as the advertising tricks extremely delicate,  consumers haven't the opportunity to prepare. It causing-> causes the customers to select products but ignore (the side effects of the product)-> their side effects. As a result, this phenomenon negatively affects the healthful of people->-> clients' health or (the welfare of users)-> users' budgets.

However, I am also convinced that the sorts of advertising may also lead to positive outcomes. One possibility is that some ads carry contents related->relating to social changes, that-> which can help promote empathy and a sense of responsibility in human-> the community. For example, environmental protection ads (also call people's attention to the problem,...)-> play an essential role in raising humans' conciousness of preserving the planet's environment conditions.

(In conclusion, while there are justifications for the society wouldn’t be beneficial from a ban total sorts of advertising, I would contend that the negative consequences are more prominent.) ->*Đề xuất: In conclusion, regardless of the justifications for the advertisments' negative effects, I am certain that the ads' disadvantages are completely undeniable. 

 

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