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Question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both this view and give you our opinion.


Nowadays, many people claim that the way to accept a bad situation like an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is good for them. In my opinion, I strongly money believe that people should try to improve such situations is better than avoid it.
On the one hand, people have a positive side in life with accepting a bad situation. When they feel depressed with their job or they have less money than they expect, If they learn the way to adapt to these issues, they have a comfortable mind, do not worry about it every day. This leads to reducing stress, moreover. people have a happy life and enjoy every day instead of tired and pressured.


On the other hand, If they continue having improved and managed to overcome their fear, they will have wonderful results. For example, when we do not have money to study, we should find a job to learn money. Although in the first period, we may behave difficult situation, with effort and  purpose we can do it . In addition, we can create change for ourselves by knowing the best ability to develop or improve our condition. That is better than just give up and accept hard conditions.


In conclusion, the way to live in a bad situation is not bad but I strongly agree with the idea that people are better to try and improve their condition if it does not like they want.

Answer 1

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both this view and give you our opinion.

 

Nowadays, many people claim It is often claimed that the way   to  accepting an  bad  unfavourable situation in which life has thrown at them is the best option.  like an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money is good for them. In my opinion, However, I strongly money believe that people should try to improve such situations is better rather than avoid it. 

 

On the one hand, people have a positive side in life with accepting a bad situation. When they feel depressed with their job or they have less money than they expect, If they learn the way to adapt to different issues, they and have a comfortable mind, work depression or a financial shortfall is never a daily hard-solving problem do not worry about it every day . This leads to Then comes reducing stress, as people feel a sense of security and happiness to some extent have a happy life and enjoy every day instead of tired and pressured.

 

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Answer 2

On the other hand, while some may feel that acceptance is the optimal choice, I believe that  If they continue having improved and managed to overcome their lear, they will have wonderful results by bettering these situations. For example, we could find a part-time job along with studying when being lack of money to pay for fees and living cost.when we do not have money to study, we should find a job to learn (ũa?) money. Although in the first period,  it may be hard to acquaint with  difficult harzardous situation in the first period, they can achieve stunning success thanks to their continued effort with effort and we can do it and earn. purpose in enough money for study. In addition, individuals can create change to discover their ability and improve their skills and better lives for ourselves by knowing the best ability to develop or improve our condition. This is better more than just give up and accept hard conditions.

 

In conclusion, the way to live in tolerate an unpleasant situation is not bad but I strongly agree with the idea that people are better to try and improve their condition if it does not like they want.  in most cases, making an attempt to improve unfavorable circumstances will be rewarded.

 

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