write about my father

Question

I think maybe everyone will love my mother more. But I love my father more. My father is a great person for some following reasons.
Firstly, he is a frank person and love children. Secondly, he is one person who knows to look after my family.
Thirdly, he is one person who always makes everyone in my family laugh evenwhen in the most difficult situations.
For me, my father is a great person in all great people.
 

Answer 1

Mình nghĩ là bạn dùng từ khá là đơn giản và có một chút lỗi ngữ pháp, bạn lặp từ hơi nhiều và nghĩa của câu có vẻ không ổn lắm. Mình nghĩ bạn nên học thêm từ vựng và cấu trúc ngữ pháp cho kĩ nhé Mấy chỗ mình gạch chân là nó hơi có vấn đề ấy
 

I think maybe everyone will love my mother more. But I love my father more. My father is a great person for some following reasons. 

Firstly, he is a frank person and love children. Secondly, he is one person who knows to look after my family. 
Thirdly, he is one person who always makes everyone in my family laugh evenwhen in the most difficult situations. 
For me, my father is a great person in all great people.