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Talk about my childhood memories about school, I have to say that I used to be a student of Luong Son A primary school. Actually, there are many things which I take pride in is that my school is (very) completely (clean) spotless and beautiful, beside that, all of the teachers and students are very [(innocent)-từ này là vô tội mà], fun, [(friendly and hospitable)-nghĩa nó same nhau rồi nha bạn].A number of students are roughly six hundred students and seventy-five teachers. About the facilities, there are 25 rooms in this school. [(Fifteen rooms are for classes, two room is for the teachers, a special room for the Head Teacher and other room.)-nối thành câu ghép luôn đi bạn] To be more specific, rooms are separated into 3 main purposes: rooms used for classes is about fifteen, two rooms are used for teachers, the last room is a special room where the Head Teacher works there and so on.One of the main reasons that makes me proud of that the results of the school is pretty good. A group of teachers is (They are) high-qualified. They (loves) treated us (like) as their own children. Around the school, you can probably see there is a spacious play ground in front of the school. All in all, I love my school very much.
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