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Question

Every child want to become a new good person when they start having a job. I also wish for a good job in the future and I dream of being a businessman. My most respectable teacher said that: " Any country wants to develop rapidly and improve people life, its economy must develop first". I realized that we each have to promote our talent in other to resolve national problem of bad economic situation so becoming a businessman is the best idea ever I can give out for myself. Business job needs a lot of skills such as good observation, overcoming stress effort and confident communication but I am always ready for a challenging working evironment, I will try more. Furthermore, my future job will be a well-paid job if I devote enough for it. With huge passion for this job, I think I will have no difficulty making my dream come true by studying hard. "Practice makes perfect", I believe I can gain the fruit if I never give up.

Answer 1

want là động từ nguyên thể không có dạng wants em nhé. Em dùng every ở đầu là dạng số nhiều nhưng lại mặc định "he" ở vế thứ 2.

respected là dạng Verb sao lại dùng như adj miêu tả về người?

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Comments

Cảm ơn, nhưng mình nghĩ dùng every children sẽ cộng với động từ chia số ít

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child là số ít của children.
every child chứ không có every children.
Ta có thể ghi :Every child want....
Do want là động từ khuyết thiếu hay sao quên rùi, nên không thêm s.
Mình mới vô phần mềm kiểm tra ngữ pháp và đây là kết quả

 

Phần màu xanh là sai ngữ pháp, ở dưới có câu gợi ý đúng

Không có câu every children.

Các phần còn lại đa số là ổn, nhưng mà trước " national problem" phải có từ "a" hay "the".

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Cảm ơn bạn!

Answer 2

Every childen wants to become a new good person when they star having a job. I also wish for a good job in the future and I dream of being a business man. My most respectable teacher said that: " Any country wants to develop rapidly and increase people life, it's economy must develop first". I realized that we each has to use our talent in other to resolve national problem of bad economic situation so becominng a businessman is the best idea ever I can give out for myself. Business job needs a lot of skills such as good observation, overcoming stress effort and confident comunication but I am always ready for a challenging working evironment, I will try more. Futhermore, my future job will be a well-paid job if I devote enough for it. With huge passion for this job, I think I will have no difficulty making my dream comes true by studying hard. "Pratise makes perfect", I believe I can gain the fruit if I never give up.

it's economy must develop first". => its

I realized that we each has to use our talent => have

making my dream comes true => come

Comments

Cảm ơn nhiều lắm!

Answer 3

Every children wants want to become a new good person when they start having a job. I also wish for a good job in the future and I dream of being a business man businessman (bn k0 nên viết cách nếu k nó sẽ thành từ khác). My most respectable teacher said that: " Any country wants to develop rapidly and increase improve people life, its economy must develop first". I realized that we each have to use our talent using their own talent in other things to resolve national problem of bad economic situation so becoming a businessman is the best idea ever I can give out for myself. Business job needs a lot of skills such as good observation, overcoming stress effort and confident communication but I am always ready for a challenging working evironment work environment, I will try more. Furthermore, my future job will be a well-paid job if I devote enough for it. With huge passion for this job, I think I will have no difficulty making my dream come true by studying hard. "Practice makes perfect", I believe I can gain the fruit if I never give up.

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Cảm ơn bạn nha!

Answer 4

Every child wants to become a new good person when they start having a job. I also wish for a good job in the future and I dream of being a businessman. My most respectable teacher said that: " Any country wants to develop rapidly and improve people life, its economy must develop first". I realized that we each have to promote our talent in other to resolve the national problem of the bad economic situation so becoming a businessman is the best idea ever I can give out for myself. The business job needs a lot of skills such as good observation, overcoming stress effort and confident communication but I am always ready for a challenging work environment, I will try more. Furthermore, my future job will be a well-paid job if I devote enough to it. With the huge passion for this job, I think I will have no difficulties making my dream come true by studying hard. "Practice makes perfect", I believe I can gain the fruit if I never give up.

Kĩ năng còn yếu kém, có gì mong lượng thứ ^^