fast food writing task 1

Question

The given line graph illustrates the amount of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers over a course of 25 years starting from 1975

As can be seen from the graph, while there was a considerable increase in the consumption of pizza and hamburgers, the amount of fish and chips eaten decreased over the shown period

In 1975, fish and chips were popular among Autralian teenagers. At that time, the consumption of fish and chips reached a peak of 100 times per year. After decreasing consistently in 1980, the popularity of fish and chips increased slightly in 1985. The consumption of this fast food fell significantly from 1985 to 2000, just under 40 times per year.

On the other hand the popularity of pizza and hamburgers rose substantial. In 1975, the demand for those stood at 5 times eaten per year. Pizza's consumption experienced a gradual increase, just over 80 times eaten per year in 1995 and remained for the rest of the given period. Similar to that, the amount of hamburgers eaten increased markedly and peak at 100 times a year in 2000.

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Answer 1

ở câu đầu para cuối nên sửa thành "rose substantially" nhé bạn.

Comments

oh, thanks!!!

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Bổ sung đề bài và hình đi mình góp ý cho.

Answer 2

On the other hand thêm dấu phẩy nha

Answer 3

_Bạn bị lặp 1 số từ như amount, consumption, increase hay australian teenagers

_ Bạn có thể dùng the figure for để tránh bị lặp amount/ grow, rise, augment, jump,... cho increase

_ remained stable for the rest of the surveyed period ( để tránh lặp lại given)