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Question

The given bar chart compares and contrasts on the changes in the number of times residents in the USA ate out from 2003 to 2013.

Overal, it is evident that the percentage of people ate in fast food restaurants once or twice a month and a few times a year rose while the remainings decreased over 10 years period

In details, the most striking feature of the chart iss that the proportion of people ate out once a week was the highest figure with 31% in 2003, then rose significantly to reach a peak of approcimately 33% in 2006 before declining to 28% in 2013.Similarly, the rate of individuals ate in restaurants everyday started at only 4% in 2003 and then witnessed a minimal decline to 3% in 2006. After that, the statistic remained stable at 3% from 2006 to 2013. In a stark contrast, there was a gradual increase in the percentage of folks ate out once or twice a month from 30% in 2003 to 33% in 2013

Answer 1

Hello Hoaithung, bạn xem qua góp ý của mình dưới nhé.

Lần tới gửi bài bạn post đầy đủ đề bài và biểu đồ để nhận được góp ý tốt nhât nhé.

The given bar chart compares and contrasts on (it is reluctant and wrong) the changes ( bỏ S nhé) in the number of times residents in the USA ate out from 2003 to 2013. 

Overal lỗi chính tả, it is evident that the percentage of people ate ( why used ate? it should be eat) in fast food restaurants once or twice a => per month and a few times a => per year rose (rose nội động từ)  while the remainings decreased over 10 years period

In details, the most striking feature of the chart iss  lỗi chính tả that the proportion of people ate out once a week was the highest figure with 31% in 2003, then rose significantly to reach a peak of approcimately  lỗi chính tả33% in 2006 before declining to 28% in 2013. Similarly, the rate of individuals ate in restaurants everyday => ever day  lỗi chính tảstarted at only 4% in 2003 and then witnessed a minimal decline to 3% in 2006. After that, the statistic remained stable at 3% from 2006 to 2013. In a stark contrast, there was a gradual increase in the percentage of folks ate out once or twice a month from 30% in 2003 to 33% in 2013

Comments

Bạn ơi dùng ate vì từ 2006 đến 2013 là quá khứ mà ta? với everyday sao lại sai ạ ? ever day là sao ạ?

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Chào Hoaithung

1. ate from 2006 to 2013. Chổ này theo như bạn nói thì vẩn đúng, nhưng mình prefer viết lại đề bài theo kiểu thời điểm hiện tại mô tả nội dung của biểu đồ. Từ phần tổng quan và thân bài mới dùng thì quá khứ.

2. Everyday được dùng như tính từ, every day được dùng như trạng từ, thể hiện sự lặp đi lặp lại hàng ngày nhé.

Cùng biểu đồ này bạn thử viết lại vài lần mình góp ý vài lần xem kết quả ntn nhé :))