The line graph illutrates data about the players' salaries of that basketball, football and baseball players received on a yearly basis (measured in dollars) between 1970 and 2000 from 1970 to 2000. Overall, the players' salaries paid for players taking part in of the three sports increased over the period of 31 years. Although the three trends were similar in terms of a general growth, and the players' salaries of basketball players were was the highest ones.
In the 1970-1985 period, the players' salaries of basketball rose steadily, to remained around 500,000 dollars.(Câu này không chuẩn bạn nha, vì chỉ đến năm 1985 nó vượt qua 500,000 còn lại dưới hết mà, với nó tăng lên chứ có giữ không đổi đâu nên bạn dùng remained không chính xác) From 1990 to 1995, the players' salaries climbed dramatically to over 1,500,000 dollars. In 2000, however (sai nghĩa nha bạn, nếu muốn mình nghĩ bạn có thể dùng interestingly), the figure for the basketball increased significantly to reach a peak of nearly 2,400,000 dollars, which was its highest point during the 31-year period. which was more than twenty times that of the amount at the starting year (1970). (nếu bạn muốn dùng mệnh đề quan hệ với which thì nên dùng cho so sánh như thế này)
Over the same period, the players' salaries of football and baseball varied more constantly (bạn diễn đạt chỗ này không rõ lắm) than those of baketball. They went up slightly to around 500000 dollars between 1970 and 1990 (bạn diễn đạt chỗ này không khớp với data trong hình). Players' salaries of baseball reached the peak, of 1500000 dollars, in 2000 while those of football reached its highest point, of about 800000 dollars, in 1995.
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