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The line graph gives information about the tendency of using internal technological in homes in UK  Overall, it's conspicious that all items have an upward trend  for thoroughly 7 years. Within that time, CD player is the most popular products pursued continously in United Kingdom all the time  Between 1996 and 1997, people showed their preference for two sorts of devices, which are CD player and media computer,with 60 percent and 30 percent, respecetively. Meanwhile, mobile phone had just 20 percent used. For two years, up to 1999, while CD player rose gradually by about five percent, there was an equivalent in the figure for home computer and mobile phone, followed by an increase of approximately ten percent each items  At that time, internet, which is a new modern invention, used in UK. From 1999 to 2003, the principal trends in all products are a growth. Whereas CD player reached to the highest level, with about 70 percent, the percentage of connecting Internet rose dramatically to above 40 percent in 2003. On the other hand, despite a variation in 2 years, but after 2001, mobile phone peaked at 20 percent, in addition, computer used at home also went up steadily about 10 percent each year

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Bài của bạn khá tốt, theo mình thì câu "From 1999 to 2003, the principal trends in all products are a growth." hơi lủng củng cần chỉnh lại cho mượt nè.

Ngoài ra thì mình nhớ là đã dùng "Despite" thì không đi kèm với "But".