Bài IELTS Task 1: Electricity production in France by sources (TW-h)

Question

The given line graph provides information about the amount of electricity produced in France using four different sources namely thermal, nuclear, hydroelectric, and renewables over a period of 32 years.

 

It’s clear that nuclear power was the most part of the total electricity output over the period shown. In contrast, renewables power supplies the amount of electricity with the lowest contribution.

 

Thermal, hydroelectric, and renewables power are three sources with no significant change, whereas nuclear power seen an increased dramatically. At the beginning of the period shown in 1980, thermal power was the major source of electricity with roughly 120 terawatt-hours of power. The originating point has an equivalent are thermal and hydroelectric sources with around 70 terawatt-hours of power in 1980.

 

Since 1985, nuclear was the primary source of electricity with robust production growth and over the following years, this source has been increasing continuously. The highest output of this power reached about 425 terawatt-hours of power in 2005. Renewables are the opposite of nuclear power, from 1980 to nearly 2000, this source was without valuable contribution. At the beginning of 2000, renewables have a rose slightly.

Answer 1

Your essay has enough coherence or cohesion . Your vocabulary and grammar is quite good so i guess you will get 7.0

Answer 2

The given line graph compares the amount of electricity produced by four different sources namely Thermal, Nuclear, Hydroelectric and Renewables in France from 1980 to 2010.

Overall, whereas electricity production of Nuclear and Renewables sources increased, the opposite was true for Hydro and Thermal. It is also notable that Nuclear power generated the most over the period.

In 1980, the output of Nuclear power was nearly 70 TW-h, which is much higher than the figure for Renewables source, producing a neligible amount. In the following 25 years, there was a dramatic rise to a peak of 425 TW-h in the electricity amount generated by Nuclear power in 2005, followed by a slight fall to just over 410 Tw-h in 2010. By contrast, despite the marginal output during the first 25 years, the figure for Renewables source then gradually increased to 20 at the end of the period.

Looking at the other energy sources, Thermal power produced the higher amount of electricity than Hydroelectric one in 1980. However, this figure soon experienced a considerable decrease in 1985 and continued to fall to about 50 Tw-h at the end of the period. Similarily, some minor fluctuations were saw in the output of Hydroelectric, before reaching at 50 TW-h in 2010.

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Answer 3

Theo mình, bài này có nhiều lỗi sai, nên khó đc 7.0, đừng vì những feedbacks như v mà tự tin nhé.

The given line graph provides information about the amount of electricity produced in France using four

different sources namely thermal, nuclear, hydroelectric, and renewables over a period of 32 years.

 

It’s clear that nuclear power was the most part of the total electricity output over the period shown. In contrast, renewables power supplies -> supplied ( quá khứ mà)the amount of electricity with the lowest contribution.

 

Thermal, hydroelectric, and renewables power are -> were three sources with -> that had/having( đc tăng band khi dùng relative clauses) no significant changes, whereas nuclear power seen -> saw an increased dramatically -> 1 là saw a dramatic increase. 2 là increased dramatically. At the beginning of the period shown in 1980, thermal power was the major source of electricity with roughly 120 terawatt-hours of power. The originating point has-> had an equivalen-> phải có s, vì sau đó bạn khi 2 cái mà t are -> were thermal and hydroelectric sources with around 70 terawatt-hours of power in 1980.

 

Since-> In 1985, nuclear was the primary source of electricity with robust production growth -> robust đã mang nghĩa nhiều r, mình nghĩ nên ghi :the growth of production and over the following years, this source has been increasing_> sai tenses continuously. The highest output of this power reached about 425 terawatt-hours of power in 2005. Renewables are the opposite of nuclear power, from 1980 to nearly 2000, this source was without valuable contribution. At the beginning of 2000, renewables have a rose-> noun có rise là rise và ghi là slight rise hoặc rose slightly slightly.