IELTS-TASK 1 (LINE GARPH): Starmouth School Libraby

Question

 

The line graph compare and contrast the data on the changes in the number of library books read by students who were males and females at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012. Overall, the number of library books read by boys and girls has fluctuation, but the trends were upward. 

In 2009, there were more the boys reading books than the girls. Looking into the detail, the number of female students read about over 20 books, while male students read double with approximately 60 books.

Between 2009 and 2010, there has been rised to 40 and 80 books read. Over the same period, the girl students have soared.

After one year, in 2011, both of boys and girls have the same number of books read with 100 books. In 2012, the boys students were fell slightly to 80 books, while the girls got a peaked at 140 books.

In conclusion, the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012 which mentioned above.

Answer 1

1. You wrote: The line graph compare and contrast the data on the changes in...

Feedback: Make sure that your verb is conjugated for your third person singular subject "The line graph". Did you mean "The line graph compares"? 

Suggestion: The line graph compares

3. You wrote: ...of library books read by boys and girls has fluctuation, but the trends were upward...Suggestion: have, haven

4. You wrote: ... Between 2009 and 2010, there has been rised to 40 and 80 books read. Over the same ...Suggestion: rose