Agree or Disagree?

Question

Topic: Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no denying that the death penalty play a important role in society’s security by stopping the growth of the violent criminality. Therefore, some people believe that it is compulsory for limiting the cruelty in society. From my perspective I totally agree with this opinion and I will give my personal view.

The first and most obvious reason is that, death penalty bring the peaceful, well-qualified and safe life to society. Let’s imagine a particular dangerous offender who are not subjected to the death penalty. After they get out of jail, those who have witnessed against them or those who have ever judged them will not have peaceful life because of anxiety, fear of someday being revenged. As a result, the others will lose faith in the law because they never assist in witnessing of a killer since they afaird of being implicated and possibly killed and the police will face many challenge to maintain the society’s secruity.

Another reason why I am in favour of keeping capital punishment is that it will punish a criminal as an example for others. To be more precise, everybody must think about the consequence when they do anthing. Thanks to this, people can raise more awareness and confident before any situations in order not to pay a heavy rise for any inconsiderate action.

In conclusion, it can be said that capital punishment contribute to assist the government protect people from dangerous ingredients. My personal view is that government should keep capital punishment, however the capital punishment should be more humanized.

 

Answer 1

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