cambrige 11, test 1

Question

The circle charts illustrating the proportion of water consumption for 3 main purposes in 6 regions of the world. Overall, the majority of purposes consumed for Agricultural use.

According to the given charts, Industrial purpose is the largest percentage in North America and Europe with 48% and 53% respectively, on the other hand, this figure took the smallest proportion in South America, Africa, as well as in Central Asia from 5% to 10%, and there was an exception in South East Asia with the middle percentage rank. Meanwhile, the water consumed for agriculture, which was the most essential amount of water in all regions, took up from 71% to 88% and ranked the second place in proportion with 39% in North American and 32% in Europe.As can be seen, the Domestic use was registered slightly from 7% to 19% compared to the others,

Answer 1

The circle pie charts illustrating illustrate the proportion of water consumption for 3 main purposes in 6 regions of the world. Overall, the majority of purposes consumed for Agricultural use. Of all the areas listed, the majority of water is ultilized for Agricultural purpose, except for Europe and North America.

According to the given charts, Industrial purpose is the largest percentage in North America and Europe with at 48% and 53% respectively, .On the other hand, this figure took is the smallest(lowest) proportion (xài figure thì không xài prorpotion) in South America, Africa, as well as in Central Asia, standing at the 5% to 10% mark, and there was an exception in South East Asia with the middle percentage rank. (tách đoạn)

In terms of the water consumed for agriculture, which was is the most essential amount of water in all regions, took take up from 71% to 88% and ranks the second place in proportion usage, with  at 39% in North American and 32% in Europe.[Đoạn này mình có thể rewrite lại:... ranks the second place in both North American and Europe, at 39% and 32% respectively] As can be seen, the Domestic use was registered slightly from 7% to 19% compared to the others. (Nên viết thêm về mục này)

 

Bài viết của bạn khá ngắn. Mình thấy chart này cũng không có quá nhiều categories, chỉ có 3 cái, nên mình nghĩ bạn nên tận dụng viết nhiều hơn. và bạn chú ý tách đoạn vì phần Body phải có 2 đoạn, ở trên mình đã gợi ý cách tách cho bạn rồi. Bài này không có nêu mốc thời gian, nên bạn dùng thì hiện tại đơn cho bài nhé, Theo mình thì bài của bạn sẽ nằm ở tầm 5.0.