IELTS Task 2: 12/1/2017:It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Question

It is believed that countries should not be encouraged to offer a huge number of young people higher education. Personally, I disagree with this policy because of the development of economy, social stability, and the local culture.

The first reason is that if people are well- educated and professional, they will be the important factor for the growth of local economy. This is because high skilled workers have many opportunities to attend the leading industries of their countries namely computer science, nanotechnology, and organic agriculture.  As a result, there would have creative and morden procducts which can attract foreign companies’ investment.

Social stability is the second important point which some local authorities should pay attention to. It is clear that studying in universities helps teenagers to build the good lifestyle. Youngers have chances to attend in useful outside and inside activities on campus instead of join illegal activities like robberies and drugs. Therefore, the decline of crime rate and the disapperance of  the social unrest make citizens feel safe to live.

The last reason must be the protection of traditional culture, which is taught in numberous major universities. Thanks to tourism classes, youngers can know how to maintain and improve the values of cultute creatively and significantly. For example,students have learn foreing languages and tourist skills to communicate and exchange with visitors across the globe.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I am not agreeable to this befief.  It is essential that countries should create more universities for youngers to study.

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