WRITING ABOUT Mid-Autumn

Question

Mid Autumn is a special Festival in some countries of Asia in general and  Vietnam in particular. In fact, Mid Autumn is festival which intended for children. In  Vietnam, this festival springs from legend : The moon and a kid. The legend explains how the moon is shinest in mid autumn and why people see a banian tree and a kid on the moon. The moon is called Sister Moon and the kid is Cuoi.

Mid Autumn begins from 14 to 15 August, in Vietnamese lunar calendar. In these day, children are going to pick the lantern up and go around streets or towns. Children will be given gifts such as pie, candy, star lantern... They will be seen lion dance or musical concert. Almost children are really into seeing lion dance and follow it that go everywhere. Some children bring a small torch that includes oil and rag to burn. And others bring clarinet and drum to make the festival more eventful.

However, mid autumn festival is also festival for business. The streets have many stores that sale pie, cake. This is occasion that many people present cake each other. Pie mid autumn is a kind of special cake that is only in mid autumn festival. There are many kind of pies such as soft cake, pie with egg , hog pie, croissant… The Pie mid autumn have special taste. It is sweet smeeling and very delicious. Almost Vietnamese people love pie mid autumn and buy it for family.

Mid Autumn became a tradition festival in Vietnam. It is a part of Vietnamese culture. Anyone who grown up in Vietnam, is regular knowing and joining in this festival.

Answer 1

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• Mid Autumn became becomes a tradition tradional (conventional) festival in Vietnam
• Anyone who grown grows up in Vietnam, is regular regularly knowing knows and joining takes part in this festival
• Mid Autumn is a special Festival occuring in some several countries of Asia in general and Vietnam in particular. In fact, Mid Autumn is the festival, which intended for is celebrated to children annually

 

Answer 2

Mid Autumn is a special Festival in some countries of Asia in general and  Vietnam in particular. In fact, Mid Autumn is the festival which is attended by/ attract attentions from  children. In  Vietnam, this festival comes  from a folk story : The moon and a kid. The legend explains how the moon is shinest in mid autumn and why people see a banian tree and a kid on the moon. The moon is called Sister Moon and the kid is Cuoi. 

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