chữa đề IELTS hàng tuần

Question

Of all the future job, tour guide is the one i like best for some following reasons

First and fore most, tourism is developing examples of tourist sites attracting many foregn visitors

Second, it's easy for example when we go to an interview the good english interview, it also help us recruit easily because most travelers are foreign guests

Last but not least, the tour guide helps us understand the cultural geography of art and architecture to serve for example,when presenting a brief profile of the geographic history of a column or a long-term history for foreign guests, we must know understand it

Tour guide is indeed a good hobby

Answer 1

Of all the future job, tour guide is the one i like best for some following reasons

First and foremost, tourism is developing examples of tourist sites attracting many foregn visitors (mình chưa hiểu ý bạn qua câu này, 'ngành du lịch là 1 vd phát triển của các địa điểm thu hút khách nước ngoài'???)
Second, it's easy for example when we go to an interview the good English interview, it also helps us recruit easily because most travelers are foreign guests.
Last but not least, the tour guide helps us understand the cultural geography of art and architecture to serve. For example,when presenting a brief profile of the geographic history of a column or a long-term history for foreign guests, we must know understand it   to introduce to them. This is a work which any tour guide has to do.
Tour guide is indeed a good hobby.

Nhận xét:

-Bạn không được tách các ý ra, nghĩa là khi viết 'First' thì sau đó vẫn tiếp tục viết các ý trong 'Second', không được xuống dòng.

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