[WRITING TASK 1] The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria

Question

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

The line graph illustrates the expenditure on books in four distinct nations from 1995 to 2005. The unit in measurement is US dollar.

Overall, throughout a decade, there existed an increase in the amount spent on books in all countries. Apparently, German outspent others on books in comparison.

During the first four years, the expense of books fluctuated in Italy, it rose by 5 million in 1997 and went down to the same figures in initial in 1999. Besides, other countries witnessed burgeons in the amount of book spending. Specifically, both German and Austrian paid more than nearly 10 million for books and an approximate 5 million more spent by French.

Continuously, the amount of book expense flattened out in Austria until 2001 prior to a dramatic development of over 20 million to reach 60 million in the next two years to overcome Italy, and finally slowed down with a growth of 10 million. Italy and France kept on their increase and respectively hit 52 million and 75 million of books expenditure in 2005. Germany remained at the leading book-spending position after arriving at 95 million in 2005 after a marginal decrease from 1999 to 2003.    

 

Answer 1

The line graph illustrates the expenditure on books in four distinct nations from 1995 to 2005. The unit in measurement is US dollar.

Overall, throughout a decade, there[W1]  existed an increase in the amount spent on books in all countries[W2] . Apparently, German outspent others on books in comparison.[W3]

During the first four years, the expense of books fluctuated in Italy, it rose by 5 million in 1997 and went down to the same figures in initial [W4] in 1999. Besides, other countries witnessed burgeons[W5]  in the amount of book spending. Specifically, both German and Austrian paid more than nearly 10 million for books and an approximate 5 million more spent by French.

Continuously, the amount of book expense flattened out in Austria until 2001 prior to a dramatic development of over 20 million to reach 60 million in the next two years to overcome Italy, and finally slowed down with a growth of 10 million. Italy and France kept on their increase and respectively hit 52 million and 75 million of books expenditure in 2005[W6] . Germany remained at the leading book-spending position after arriving at 95 million in 2005 after a marginal decrease [W7] from 1999 to 2003

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 [W1]Vocabulary error: ‘’It’’ is right word.

 [W2]Idea suggestion: There is a trend, which increased the amount of money spending on book in all countries.

 [W3]Vocabulary error: IT seems these words are meaningless, => Noticeably, Germans spent the highest amount of money on books.

 [W4]Redundant words.

 [W5]Idea suggestion: Witnessed an increase of/in.

 [W6]Idea suggestion: Kept increasing and hitting 52 million and 75 million in 2005.

 [W7]Vocabulary error: What it means, personally I think it is not appropriate in this context.

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CRITERIA	GRADE	COMMENT
Task Response	7	• covers the requirements of the task • (A) presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages • (GT) presents a clear purpose, with the tone consistent and appropriate • clearly presents and highlights key features/bullet points but could be more fully extended
Coherence and Cohesion	7	• logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout • uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
Lexical Resource	7	• uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision • uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation • may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation
Grammatical Range and Accuracy	7	• uses a variety of complex structures • produces frequent error-free sentences • has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
Overall	7.0