Test 1 Cambridge 7

Question

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance

for music and sport, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child

can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion.

 

It is commonly claimed that talents such as music and sport are natural gifts, whereas others

believe that any individual can become superstar as long as being educated properly. In this

essay, I will examine both points of view and express my opinion.

 

On one hand, it is believed that some people have been prominent in music and sport since they

were born. If someone’s talent is genetically inherited from his ancestors, he does not need to

make further efforts to better his skills. A good illustration is Kasper Schmeichel, whose father is

Peter Schmeichel, one of the greatest Danish goalkeepers. Kasper appeared to be gifted from his

very early childhood; hence, his potential was quickly seen by Manchester City, starting a

professional football career easily.

 

On the other hand, critics claim that anyone can be brilliant by education and hard work. Thomas

Edison, an excellent American inventor, said that: “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-

nine percent perspiration”, which means an effort plays a major part in success. Taking me as an

example, I was attributed to be incompetent at math on my grade 11. Only when I met my

respectable teacher at the age of 18 was my thirst for math stimulated. By his fascinating and

dedicating education, I made progress gradually and passed an entrance exam with mark 9.

 

In conclusion, both arguments have their own merits. Personally, however, I tend to gravitate

towards the latter view that anyone can be exceptional under appropriate circumstances and good

preparations.

Answer 1

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Essay:

It is commonly claimed that talents such as music and sport are natural gifts, whereas others believe that any individual can become superstar as long as being educated properly. In this essay, I will examine both points of view and express my opinion.

On the one hand, it is believed that some people have been prominent in music and sport since they were born. If someone’s talent is genetically inherited from his ancestors, he does not need to make further efforts to better his skills. A good illustration is Kasper Schmeichel, whose father is Peter Schmeichel, one of the greatest Danish goalkeepers. Kasper appeared to be gifted from his very early childhood; hence, his potential was quickly seen by Manchester City, starting a professional football career easily.

On the other hand, critics claim that anyone can be brilliant by education and hard work. Thomas Edison, an excellent American inventor, said that: “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration”, which means an effort plays a major part in success[p1] . Taking me as an example, I was attributed to be incompetent at math on my grade 11. Only when I met my respectable teacher at the age of 18 was my thirst for math stimulated. By his fascinating and dedicating education, I made progress gradually and passed an entrance exam with mark 9[p2] .

In conclusion, both arguments have their own merits. Personally, however, I tend to gravitate towards the latter view that anyone can be exceptional under appropriate circumstances and good preparations.

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 [p1]Idea Suggestion: Giving a quote is not recommended ! Even though it is from a famous figure

You should provide idea and then present it, rather than being reliant to examples most of the time

Reference: “It is clear that even though sport persons are mostly gifted with competence, however, their daily routines always involve hours of intense training with rigorous plan of diet. Therefore,….”

 [p2]Idea Suggestion: You should take some famous public figure, though your way of giving example is very good à Provide more persuasive explantion

 [p3]The overall paragraph is very good ! No grammar or vocabulary mistake could be found

However, giving one or two examples is adequate, do not be over-reliant

à Provide your own idea and fully supported with relevant explanation and result

 

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