[Band 6.5] Task 1 - The bar chart below shows percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK

Question

Task 1: The bar chart below shows percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006.

 

Answer:

            The bar chart compares the proportion of daily Internet users in four different age groups in the UK between 2003 and 2006.

            Overrall, the percentage of young people who used Internet everyday was much higher than those in older groups.

            There were above 80% of people age 16 to 24 used Internet everyday in those years. The figure for this group in 2005 was 90% and this was the highest figure shown on this bar chart. By constrast, noone in group of 65 year olds or more used Internet daily in 2003 while only around 13% of them used it in 2005.

            The proportions of daily Internet users in 25 to 44 year-olds and 55 to 64 year-olds groups saw a steady growth throughout the period shown. The figure for the former group increased from 50% to 80% while the figure for the latter one rose from 30% to 50%. Adults age 45 to 54 had a fluctuated percentage of Internet users and peaked at 60% in 2004.

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Answer 1

The bar chart compares the proportion of daily Internet users in four five different age groups in the UK between 2003 and 2006.

          Overrall Overall, the percentage of young people who used Internet everyday was much higher than those in of older groups.

          There were above 80% of people aged 16 to 24 used Internet every day in those years. The figure for of this group in 2005 was 90% and this was the highest figure shown on this the bar chart. By constrast contrast, no one in group of 65 year olds or more used Internet daily in 2003 while only around 13% of them used it in 2005.

          The proportions of daily Internet users in 25 to 44 year-olds (No plural in compound noun) and 55 to 64 year-olds groups saw a steady growth throughout the period shown. The figure for the former group increased from 50% to 80% while the figure for of the latter one rose from 30% to 50%. At the same period, adults age 45 to 54 had a fluctuated percentage of Internet users and peaked at 60% in 2004.

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	Grade
Task Response	7 – 8	covers the requirements of the task presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages
Cohesion and Coherence	7 - 8	logically organizes information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout
Vocabulary	6	uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task makes some errors in spelling
Grammar	6	uses a variety of complex structures makes some errors in grammar
Overall	6.5	Good. Some recommendations: Don’t make silly mistakes as spelling. Revise how to use compound noun.