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In some countries, students have to pay their own college and university fees while others, government pays. Do the advantages of government spending their money on college and university fees for students outweigh the disadvantages?

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Tuition fees at universities and colleges are paid by government in some nations while others, students have to afford themselves. Governments grants for students have certain advantages and disadvantages which will be dived into in this essay, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

First of all, subsidies from government will encourage students, in particular those do not come from a wealthy family, to attend class in order to expand their range of knowledge and skills. Because of financial problems, many young people lost chance to meet their demand of learning and discovering new things. Thus, grants from government are the golden opportunity for them to fulfill the dream of studying at universities and college. For example, in Vietnam, authorities and higher education systems are trying to support students by awarding many scholarships for those struggling with poverty but do not stop craving for knowledge.

However, if financial support from government is not under control and limited carefully, it will directly affect to the nation, specifically, its economy. The number of students wishing for support is endless, so authorities ought to classify support strategy and the maximum amount of money for a certain number of students. Moreover, universities and colleges should consider to find out and granting cash for those students who actually crave to go over issues and have opportunity to attend school.

In conclusion, it is advantageous for both students and a nation when government decides to support universities and colleges students in paying tuition fees in an effective and careful way. Because generally, education that students are given today will have positive influences on a nation in a future.
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Mình đã đọc bài của bạn, mình cũng là người đang luyện viết cho nên mình cũng chỉ đóng góp ý kiến của bản thân mình. Bạn có thể feeback cho mình qua email: [email protected]. Cảm ơn bạn.

1. " many young people" ===>>> "A great deal of/ a large number young people". Gây ấn tượng hơn cho người chấm.

2. "lost chance to meet their demand..." ===>>> Động từ "meet" bạn nên dùng từ " achieve, acquire or gain"

3.  "are trying to support" ===>> mình thấy dùng cụm "to make a great effort" này tốt hơn thay thế cho động từ "try".

 4. Cụm "decide to" ===>>> "make up one's mind. 

5. "...of learning and discovering new things." ====>>> "...of learning and discovering new things which can lead them to a bright future in their career such as high social position or better income when they graduated. (Mình thêm ideas nha.) 

Đây là những góp ý của mình. Mình đoán thì bài bạn có thể đạt band 6.5 trong writing.

 

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