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Question

The graph gives information about the number cases of X disease in Someland between 1960 to 1995.

It is clear that Someland experienced considerable changes in the incidence of X disease. The number of people got this disease peaked in 1975s.

In 1960, there was about 100 cases of X disease. Over the course of 10 years staring 1965, this figure increased drammatically. After since, it peaked and stayed steady at 500 cases from 1975 to1980.

From 1980, the incidence of the patients decresed to about 350 cases. It continued to decrese steeply for the next 5 years. It is also projected to decline in the next years.

Answer 1

Theo mình thấy thì bài này có 1 đường ah nên bạn gom 2 đoạn body lại thành 1 và thêm conclusion vào.

Answer 2

Mình thấy bạn thiếu phần conclution với lại tách dòng hơi nhiều. nên thêm ý để hay hơn

Answer 3

Bài không đủ 150 từ bạn ơi! Nên thêm conclusion để kéo dài bài ra.

The graph gives information about the number cases of X disease in Someland between 1960 to 1995. from 1960 to 1995 (hoặc over the 35-year period).

It is clear that Someland experienced considerable changes in the incidence of X disease. The number of people got this disease peaked in 1975s. between 1975 and 1980

Paraphrase (the number of people affected by X disease/the number of people falling victims to X disease)

In 1960 At the first year of the period, there was about 100 cases of X disease. Over the course of 10 years staring 1965, this figure slightly increased drammatically. (tăng có chút xíu mà bạn). Likewise,  the number of people affected by X disease saw a double increase in 1970 at 200 cases. After since, it peaked and stayed steady at 500 cases from 1975 to1980.

After 1980, the incidence of the patients sharply/ dramatically decreased to about 350 cases in 1985 and no one fell victims to this disease at the end of the period. It continued to decrese steeply for the next 5 years. It is also projected to decline in the next years.

In conclusion, tóm tắt ý chính

Answer 4

In 1960, there was about 100 cases of X disease. Over the course of 10 years staring FROM 1965, this figure increased drammatically. After since, it peaked and stayed steady at 500 cases from 1975 to1980.

ADD MORE INFO : IT CAN BE SEEN THAT THERE WAS A SLIGHT INCREASE FROM 100 CASES IN 1960 TO 1970, WHILE THERE REMAIN FAIRLY UNCHANGED BETWEEN 1960 AND 1965

From 1980, the NUMBER OF INCIDENTS incidence of the patients decresed DECREASED to about 350 cases. It continued to decrese steeply for the next 5 years. It is also projected to decline in the next years AND NO CASE CAN BE SEEN IN THE PERIOD OF 1990-1995.