People are naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

Question

Some people are of the opinion that it is very difficult for them to make changes in their lives because their lives, at that time, may even get worse. Therefore, they are opposed to change the way they are living, which causes a lot of problems.

Firsly, in our life's today, there are so many things which day by day become moderner and moderner. A case in point is that in the past, people just sent letters by surface mail that took a lot of time for others to receive. However, nowadays, most of people use email instead because of its speed and convenience. If people want to keep the old way of sending mail, they might lose some important opportunities. It means that they will become backward and even be forgotten some days.

Secondly, if people are stubborn and then dont adapt quickly to new technology, they cannot improve themselves. In addition, not only the quality of life but also their own job might deteriorate. The main reason is that people cannot catch up with the development speed of life, which changes everyday, while they just like to stand at the same place, the same position.

With the hope of solving the problem above, some solutions are indicated to make the lives better. First of all, it is important that people should accept the changes and do not keep rigid attitudes. Moreover, before adapting to new ways, people should spend time on investigating if this change will have a good or bad impact. A further step is that if people feel difficult to change, they can change a little bit first and still remain the old thing which can be sound foundations.

In conclusion, life always changes, people have to keep learning from others and improve ourselves. Do not be too hidebound with the changes because this might prevents you on the way to reach at success.

 

 

Answer 1

Hello  myduyen. Apparently, this essay shows that you are very concerned about the changes in life and be aware of the impacts they have on people, which is a good point for your essay. However, I see some minor mistakes as follwing:

Some people are of the opinion that it is very difficult for them to make changes in their lives because their lives, at that time, may even get worse (can change into: For the reason that these changes might worsen their present lives).

Secondly, if people are stubborn (stubborn is used for personality or description of someone) resistant to changes and then dont adapt quickly to new technology, they cannot improve themselves. In addition, not only the quality of life but also their own job might deteriorate (lose the working efficiency) The main reason is that people cannot catch up with the development speed of life, which changes everyday, while they just like to stand at the same place, the same position. (to me this sentence seems not to fit in this paragraph and other above sentences, you are writing about the problems of "people not changing", focus on it. I suggest adding here something like: As a result or for example or blah blah....)

With the hope of solving the problem above, some solutions are indicated to make the lives better. First of all, it is important that people should accept the changes and do not keep rigid attitudes. Moreover, before adapting to new ways, people should spend time on investigating thinking if whether this the change will have a good or bad impact. A further step is that if people feel difficult to change, they can change a little bit first and still remain the old thing which can be sound used as foundations.

Regards.

Duong NGUYEN

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thank you very much:)

Answer 2

Some people are of the opinion that it is very difficult for them to make changes in their lives because at some particular points, it may be inappropriate for something different. Therefore, they are opposed to changing the way they are living, which might cause a lot of problems.

Firsly, in our present-day life, there are so many things which day by day become more and more modern. A case in point is that in the past, people used to send letters by surface mail, which took a lot of time for others to receive. However, nowadays, most of people use email instead because of its speed and convenience. If people want to keep the old way of sending mail, they might lose some important opportunities. It means that they will become backward and even be forgotten some days.

Secondly, if people are stubborn and then dont adapt quickly to new technology, they cannot improve themselves. In addition, not only the quality of life but also their own job might deteriorate. The main reason is that people cannot catch up with the pace of life, which changes everyday. Meanwhile, they prefer remaining at the same place, the same position.

With the hope of solving the problem above, some solutions are come up with to make the life better. First of all, it is important that people should accept the changes and do not keep rigid attitudes. Moreover, before adapting to new ways, people should spend time on investigating whether the change will have a good or bad impact. A further step is that if people find it difficult to change, they can change a little bit first and still maintain old things which can be a helpful basic.

In conclusion, life always changes and people have to keep learning from others and improve themselves. Do not be too hidebound with the changes because this might prevent you from achieving more of your ambitions.

I can just suggest some of my opinions in your ways of using words and grammar structures. I think you should make yourself a detailed outline so that more ideas will be given with specific examples.

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Thank you, your comment is really helpful to me:)