Most people are not interested in how their food has nên products. They only car about how much it costs. Họ true is this statement. What influences people when they buy food.

Question

Over time, there are a number of kinds of foods that have been generated and how people pick one depends on plenty of reasons.
     Obviously, price plays an important role when people purchase a product. In particular, some students who have yet to be able to earn money and still receive scanty money from their parents tend to mind how much food cost. Some multiple generations family that struggle with finances are likely to be mindful of their budget. General, being on a tight budget makes a great deal of people just focus on the cheap ones.
        On the other hand, products are chosen not only how cheap they are, but also various reasons make people decide to purchase one. For example, housewifes who are good at choosing products usually make comparisons about taste, freshness, the quality of food carefully between food, even between some places that they have ever gone shopping before. Some people never use products that originate from animal like a monk. In addition, some kinds of jobs gain plenty of time so that it make people just keen on food which they could eat quickly. In some cases, price does not waste them any minutes to consider.
       In conclusion, it seems that cost is only one of a number of factors that people take into consideration when they purchase food. Although some people look at price first, it takes others a considerable amount of money on food in order to satisfy their needs and beliefs.

Answer 1

Bài viết chưa có được logic và sai lỗi ngữ pháp, bạn xem qua một vài góp ý cuả mình phía dứơi nhé.

Over time, there are a number+S of kinds of foods that have been generated ( trong 1 câu, bạn nên dùng 1 thì thôi nhé) and how people pick one depends on plenty of reasons.

Obviously, price plays an important role when people purchase a product ( Câu này là văn nói thuần việt luôn á :)) . In particular, some a few students who have yet=> have not yet (Mình đoán thiếu chử not) to be able to earn money and still receive scanty money from their parents tend to mind how much food cost. Some multiple generations family =>multi generational families that struggle with finances are likely to be mindful of their budget. General, being on a tight budget makes a great deal of people just focus on the cheap ones.

On the other hand, products ( food mà dùng product thay thế thì không hợp lý lắm) are chosen not only how cheap they are, but also various reasons make people decide to purchase one. For example, housewifes => housewives who are good at choosing products usually make comparisons about taste, freshness, the quality of food carefully between food, even between some places that they have ever gone shopping before. Some people never use products that originate from animal like a monk. In addition, some kinds of jobs ( mấy từ này không có liên quan gì hết luôn á ) gain plenty of time so that it make people just keen on food which they could eat quickly. In some cases, price does not waste them any minutes to consider.

In conclusion, it seems that cost is only one of a number of factors that people take into consideration when they purchase food. Although some people look at price first, it takes others a considerable amount of money on food in order to satisfy their needs and beliefs. (Câu này ý giống câu trước)

Comments

OK b
Còn mấy chỗ bị gạch. Mình k hiểu lắm
-tend to mind how much food cost
-make a great deal of
2 chỗ đó

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À còn chỗ gone shopping bị gạch mất gone nữa

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À mấy chổ gạch là lỗi về nội dung ko có được logic và lỗi ngữ pháp, sửa thì hơi dài nên mình chỉ gạch ngang.

tend to mind how much food cost = những câu viết ntn chỉ dành cho phần speaking 

A great deal of + = danh từ ko đếm được ( bạn dùng people là đếm được rồi)

gone shopping = ở task 2 là dạng viết về quan điểm cá nhân, dùng thì ở quá khứ là không đúng rồi.