writing task 2:Is current academic grading helpful in performance? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Question

Nowadays, some people believe that our current academic grading plays an important role in school and this is a useful tool to help students improve their performances. In my opinion, I strongly agree with that point of view.

 

First of all, the fact that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. This indicator shows students’ knowledge and how they did in their exam. The test and grading may force a student to comprehend a concept. If the student fails in the test and receive a poor grade, that means they didn’t understand the concept properly. As a result, they may experience with learning how to improve their test- taking skills. Besides, teacher can know the current level and the problems of each students in order to find solutions for them.

 

On the other hand, I believe that current academic grading is helpful in improving students’ performances. The threat of a bad grade may make a student try to comprehend the concept in her or his test. It leads to they should have a better preparation such as an extra revision or trying to show their best performances to get the higher marks on the incoming exam. Moreover, grading is also one of requirement of higher education’s entrance like college and university. As a consequence, students have to strengthen their grades by enhancing their performance.

 

In conclusion, there is no doubt that academic grading encourages students to learn, gain more knowledge and improve their performances. Moreover, they will feel more self- confident with some small victories that leads to win and succeed in the future.

 

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Answer 1

Hello Julia, mình có góp ý ở phía dứoi bạn thử xem qua nhé.

Nowadays, some people believe that our current academic grading => grades plays an important role in school and this is a useful tool to help students improve their performances. Câu này bạn chưa paraphase các từ ở đề nhiều'' Some people believe that the grades in school system play an imperative role which is helpful in teaching and studying. In my opinion, I strongly agree with that point of view.

First of all => cấu trúc câu bạn nên dùng thống nhất, vd (on the one hand - on the other hand) the fact that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. This indicator shows students’ knowledge and how they did in their exam. The test and grading grades may force a student to comprehend a concept. If the a student fails in the test and receive a poor grade, that means they didn’t ( opinion của mình ko này dùng thì quá khứ chưa đúng lắm) understand the concept properly. As a result, they may experience with learning how to improve their test- taking skills( câu này là hệ quả của câu trước mà mình thấy ý hơi không liên quan) . Besides, teacher (add S) can => would know the current level and the problems of each students in order to find solutions for them.

On the other hand, I believe ( repeated words)  that current academic grading grades is are helpful in improving students’ performances. The threat of a bad grade add S may make a student try (cần thêm to giữa 2 động từ make và try) to comprehend the concept in her or his test. It leads to they should have (mình thấy bỏ 3 từ này câu sẽ rõ và gọn ý hơn) a better preparation such as an extra revision or trying  (các từ giữa từ nối or và and cần là 1 loại từ vd revising and trying )to show their best performances to get the higher marks on the incoming exam. Moreover, grading grade is also one of requirement of higher education’s entrance like college and university. As a consequence, students have to strengthen their grades by enhancing their performance.

Phần thân bài thứ 2 này của bạn FAIL toàn tập nhé, kiểu bài như thế này là thân bài 1 sẽ nêu quan điểm của agree và thân bài thứ hai phải nêu quan điểm của unagree nhé.