Writing task 1 Waste graph

Question

 

The line graph illustrate us three companies produced their waste throught the year from 2000 to 2015.

It is clear that the quantity of waste was significantly changed by 3 companies shown on the graph. While both company A and B decline gradually. Company C rose sharply over 15-year period .

In 2000 , the average of waste was produced 12 tones  by company A , which was the highest tones throught the period . Company B and C stood at 8 tones and 4 tones respectively . By the year of 2005 , company A fell around 1 tones . At the same time, Company B and C climded significantly about 2 tones.

A dramactic decline in company A and B was seen from 2005 to 2015 . Comapany A, in 2015, reach the lowest approximately 3 tones. While company B had dropped about 8 tones . By contrast , company C increased slightly and reached its peak , under 11 tones .

Answer 1

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The line graph illustrate ( thiếu S) us three companies produced their waste => the amount of waste was produced by three companies throught the year from 2000 to 2015. 

It is clear that the quantity => the amounts or the volumes of waste was significantly changed => fluctuated significantly throughout the period of time. by 3 companies shown on the graph. While ( khi dùng while thì các ý liên quan đều nằm trong 1 câu) both company A and B decline => declined  gradually. Company C rose sharply over 15-year period => While company A and B tended to reduce its waste output, company C increased considerably its volume of waste.

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