Bài ielts writing task 2 chủ đề social media

Question

Đề bài : Social media such as Facebook , Twitter is replacing face-to-face contact in people's everyday lives. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

Online communication has had a tremendous impact on our life . Face-to-face contact is being replaced by Facebook,Twitter,so on . I think that this revolution outweigh the disadvantages.

There are several reason why i believe that there are more the benefits than the drawbacks. It is noticeable that we can keep in touch with people who is far away from you such as old friend or accquaintences. By using social media as a contacting tool , we have ability to bring together  through videocall, voice chat. Furthermore, we are now able to maintain a friendship easily as well as avoid feeling alone when living independently without meeting each other . This benifit of social media makes it much more profitable and convenient .

Online contact generated the new age of advertising.There are many companies which have to paid a lot of money to their advertisment campaigns on television without success. Whereas, is is easier to introduce productions on facebook. For example, as long as your post is attractive enough. Your introduction will be known by many people which means you can make profit from social media . As a result , this revolution has totally changed the way that many enterprises work.

In conclusion , online communication plays an vital role on the world-at-large. We ought to pioneer its advantages and reduce negative impacts

Answer 1

Hi Tuan Anh

just some thoughts and recommendation 

Online communication has had a tremendous impact on our life (lives). Face-to-face contact is being replaced by Facebook,Twitter. so on  I think that this revolution outweigh (outweighs) the (its) disadvantages.

There are several reason (reasons) why i (I) believe that there are more the benefits than the drawbacks. It is noticeable that we can keep in touch with people who is (are) far away from you such as old friend (friends) or accquaintences (acquaintances). By using social media as a contacting tool, we have ability to bring together  through videocall (video call), voice chat. Furthermore, we are now able to maintain a friendship easily (efficiently) as well as avoid feeling alone when living independently without meeting each other . This benifit (benefit) of social media makes it much more profitable and convenient . 

Online contact generated the new age of advertising.There are many companies which have to paid (pay) a lot of money to their advertisment (advertisement) campaigns on television without success. Whereas, is (it) is easier to introduce productions on facebook (Facebook). For example, as long as your post is attractive enough. Your  (, your) introduction (advertisement) will be known by many people which means you can make a profit from social media. As a result , this revolution has totally changed the way that many enterprises work.
In conclusion , online communication plays an (a) vital role on/(in) the world-at-large. We ought to pioneer its advantages and reduce negative impacts

 

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