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In my opinion, I completely think that the Coast Guard should risk their lives to save people.

Firstly, it is to save lives. It is important to save lives to get the people back to their families safe and sound to be a hard time. As far as I know that all but one of the Air National Guard crew members are rescued by the Coast Guard vessel, the USCGC Tamaroa.

Secondly, it is their job. They get paid to rescue people and paid through people paying taxes to the government. In addition, that is a full-time responsibility assigned by the government to the Coast Guard.

Finally, some nautical crew underestimated the situation. Between the Andrea Gali and Gloucester is a confluence of two powerful weather fronts and a hurricane imminent. In a little more detail “The only sign that something is amiss is along the coast, where huge grey swells start to roll in that can be heard miles away”, “ The shroud of the sea” can be viewed as the huge swells that are forming. Instead of, they coming back, everything will be better.

In conclusion, I am sure that the coast guards and crew will be at risk. Although living and work in the open sea can be stressful and risk at first, it is something that proves worth doing after they have been familiar with it. They needed a deeper the profession more to face new challenges that put their faith in the storm.

Answer 1

In my opinion, I completely think that the Coast Guard should risk their lives to save people.

Firstly, (it is to save lives > Cả câu này ko cần thiết). It is important to save (lives to get the people > people's lives to take them) back to their families safe(bỏ) and (sound > it seems ) to be a hard time. As far as I know (that) (all but > không cần thiết) one of the Air National Guards crew members are rescued by the Coast Guard vessel, the USCGC Tamaroa.

Secondly, it is their job. They get paid to rescue people and paid(bỏ) through people paying taxes to the government. In addition, that is a full-time (responsibility assigned > assignment of responsibilities) by the government to the Coast Guard.

Finally, some nautical crew underestimated the situation. Between the Andrea Gali and Gloucester is a confluence of two powerful weather fronts and a hurricane imminent. In a little more detail “The only sign that (something > bỏ) is amiss is along the coast, where the huge grey swells start to roll in that can be heard miles away”, “ The shroud of the sea” can be viewed as the huge swells that are forming. Instead of, they are coming back, everything will be better.

In conclusion, I am sure that the coast guards and crew will be at risk. Although living and work in the open sea can be stressful and risky  at first, it is something that proves worth doing after they have been familiar with it. They needed a deeper the profession more(đoạn này lủng củng > có thể thay: They may need to gain knowledge in profession) to face new challenges that put their faith in the storm.

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